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Aboriginal woman goes for help.12 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
Congratulations for winning the free verse competition. It is so well deserved. It made me cry. The best poem I've read in a very long time. Fabulously well chosen artwork. Jen.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Congratulations for winning the free verse competition. It is so well deserved. It made me cry. The best poem I've read in a very long time. Fabulously well chosen artwork. Jen.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Hi Jen, Many thanks for reading. If it touched your emotions, I have done my job. Bless you, Kay xx
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This poem is so emotional. Lots of people would like to ignore the fact that something like this did and still does happen. This poem refuses to be ignored. Thanks for sharing and good luck on your writing endeavors.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This poem is so emotional. Lots of people would like to ignore the fact that something like this did and still does happen. This poem refuses to be ignored. Thanks for sharing and good luck on your writing endeavors.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Hi Lindsey, Many thanks for reading. And your good wishes. K xx
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Kay,
This is a sad story of the worst side of discrimination and uncaring for the poor. But also ends it hope that it may end. It shows some still fight for justice and are brave enough to seek it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hi Kay,
This is a sad story of the worst side of discrimination and uncaring for the poor. But also ends it hope that it may end. It shows some still fight for justice and are brave enough to seek it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hello Joan, Many thanks for reading. I don't know that it will end but at least our people are coming together. Blessings, Kay.
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You are most kindly welcome, Kay.
I am glad to here it.
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for highlighting this story. It still holds true many parts of the world. You did a wonderful job telling this story in this poem. I want to wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you for highlighting this story. It still holds true many parts of the world. You did a wonderful job telling this story in this poem. I want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Hi Barbara, Thanks for reading my friend. Yes, I bet it goes on in black America. Blessings, Kay xx
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A poignant free verse poem about one woman's sad plea for help and the disdain shown her by some, but the help given by one who reached out his hand to her. Sadly too many women and girls still suffer. Well written, Kay.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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A poignant free verse poem about one woman's sad plea for help and the disdain shown her by some, but the help given by one who reached out his hand to her. Sadly too many women and girls still suffer. Well written, Kay.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
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Thank you for reading Valda. It is fiction but still goes on every day. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Sanku
Yes it is self explanatory .This is a story that is happening again and again .I am glad that you have given the story a positive ending by introducing the police ..
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Yes it is self explanatory .This is a story that is happening again and again .I am glad that you have given the story a positive ending by introducing the police ..
Comment Written 18-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thank you my friend. K xx
Comment from tfawcus
Another graphic account of the shameful events that took place during the days of early settlement. Much has now changed, though sadly much has not. I hope the committee treat this entry with the respect it deserves.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Another graphic account of the shameful events that took place during the days of early settlement. Much has now changed, though sadly much has not. I hope the committee treat this entry with the respect it deserves.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
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Hello my friend. I hope you are well. Thanks for reading, every country has it's sins. K xx
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Kay, what a story you tell here! And the passion and anger conveyed within your poem gives additional impact to an already disturbing account. This elderly woman risks the dreadful consequences of racist segregation to venture on to the white man's streets in order to get help for her people. The pace and urgency of your poem, together with the excellent dialogue that you incorporate here make this a very memorable read. An excellent post revealing the kind of oppression suffered by these indigenous people.
Thank you so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Kay, what a story you tell here! And the passion and anger conveyed within your poem gives additional impact to an already disturbing account. This elderly woman risks the dreadful consequences of racist segregation to venture on to the white man's streets in order to get help for her people. The pace and urgency of your poem, together with the excellent dialogue that you incorporate here make this a very memorable read. An excellent post revealing the kind of oppression suffered by these indigenous people.
Thank you so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Good Morning Debbie, Many thanks for reading, glad you were intrigued. These things still happen today. Our people fight back but the police are corrupt, many blacks have died in custody. Love, Kay xx
Comment from Wendy G
So much damage has been done, so much cruelty and injustice. The mockery of her pleading for help is inexcusable. I am glad the policeman was helpful and sympathetic. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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So much damage has been done, so much cruelty and injustice. The mockery of her pleading for help is inexcusable. I am glad the policeman was helpful and sympathetic. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hello Wendy, These incidents happen in the NT our people fight back but many die in custody. Thanks for reading. Love, Kay xx
Comment from lyenochka
You told us quite a story with your free verse. It sounds like it was based on a real story. I'm glad that the police was able to protect and bring the criminals to justice. And that brave woman risked all to get help!
Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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You told us quite a story with your free verse. It sounds like it was based on a real story. I'm glad that the police was able to protect and bring the criminals to justice. And that brave woman risked all to get help!
Best wishes in the contest!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hello Lena, These incidents happen today and many blacks die in custody. Like America, always problems with black and white. America stole the Africans and the British took our land and murdered the owners. Not a pretty story. Love, Kay. XX