"The Gift of Life 2003"
Viewing comments for Chapter 87 "The Summer Eye Don't Remember "Original Drafts
5 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well done, Doc! Your words are poignant and strong, making you a very powerful word smith.
I always finish your pieces feeling the raw emotion.
D
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
  |
Well done, Doc! Your words are poignant and strong, making you a very powerful word smith.
I always finish your pieces feeling the raw emotion.
D
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
-
Thanks again D. Been meaning to review but hard since marriage.
56 years old and want more kids in a baby carriage!!!
Doctor Ricky
-
Ha! No worries Doc.
Comment from royowen
I don't understand how one could possibly bear the loss of a child, but if tragedy from the past rules our present or future, that I do understand, nothing will restore that loss, there are still others here, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
|
I don't understand how one could possibly bear the loss of a child, but if tragedy from the past rules our present or future, that I do understand, nothing will restore that loss, there are still others here, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2024
-
Thanks again Roy.
Sorry for the late reply.Been a little busy.
Doctor Ricky
-
Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I feel you rushed to post.
But now Dad. (I would put a comma after Dad,)
Yes now that day in November. (comma after 'Yes,')
Yes now when I was born dad.and you were happy. (comma after 'Yes," and omit the period)
Try your very best dad. (Dad)
So, dad wipe your crying eyes (Dad)
As you and the world will finally come to realize. (comma after 'realize')
Realize all You and me.together must do. (omit the period)
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
|
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I feel you rushed to post.
But now Dad. (I would put a comma after Dad,)
Yes now that day in November. (comma after 'Yes,')
Yes now when I was born dad.and you were happy. (comma after 'Yes," and omit the period)
Try your very best dad. (Dad)
So, dad wipe your crying eyes (Dad)
As you and the world will finally come to realize. (comma after 'realize')
Realize all You and me.together must do. (omit the period)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
-
Thanks Barbara another nasty day being married to a Jealous woman.
Edited.
24
Comment from papa55mike
There are many times when trying your best can't fill the deep hole inside your soul. I still feel the deep loss of our granddaughter. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
|
There are many times when trying your best can't fill the deep hole inside your soul. I still feel the deep loss of our granddaughter. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
-
Thanks very much Michael and that's my son Jason.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Memories and pain, and then hope, and again pain. I get it, it is hard to reason with the "why's" and why my child, and still move on. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
|
Memories and pain, and then hope, and again pain. I get it, it is hard to reason with the "why's" and why my child, and still move on. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
-
Thanks Iza and you too.
Doctor Ricky
