Changing the outcome
It's never too late..16 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Hand-counted fifty words, so meets that requirement of the contest.
How many times does someone wish they could go back in time and have a redo of a situation?
Would be a good situation to reverse, or undo, endings that did not turn out as they were preferred to be.
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Hand-counted fifty words, so meets that requirement of the contest.
How many times does someone wish they could go back in time and have a redo of a situation?
Would be a good situation to reverse, or undo, endings that did not turn out as they were preferred to be.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
If only life offered these kinds of "do-overs." But it doesn't, except in your stories:-) I'd like to live in Maria's world for a day.
A story with dribbling in it for a dribble flash fiction contest. Clever.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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If only life offered these kinds of "do-overs." But it doesn't, except in your stories:-) I'd like to live in Maria's world for a day.
A story with dribbling in it for a dribble flash fiction contest. Clever.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Comment from Wendy G
Perhaps this in fact a reflection on life, and the importance of perseverance, learning from mistakes, and new opportunities which are presented if one never gives up. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Perhaps this in fact a reflection on life, and the importance of perseverance, learning from mistakes, and new opportunities which are presented if one never gives up. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2024
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
Maria was able to alter the time back and replay for a better outcome, much as we can do if we have that same determination to try and try again. A good message in your Dribble flash fiction Nicole.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Maria was able to alter the time back and replay for a better outcome, much as we can do if we have that same determination to try and try again. A good message in your Dribble flash fiction Nicole.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Comment from Pam (respa)
Good artwork and story to go with it. A good opening hook introduces Maria and her determination. I like the bit of time travel after that. She was rewarded for her determination by being given another chance and taking advantage of it. A good message about doing your best and taking advantage of opportunities you are given. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Good artwork and story to go with it. A good opening hook introduces Maria and her determination. I like the bit of time travel after that. She was rewarded for her determination by being given another chance and taking advantage of it. A good message about doing your best and taking advantage of opportunities you are given. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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Comment from Claire Tennant
This little paragraph speaks volumes. You can feel Maria's determination The imagery of her dribbling of the ball down the court creates a positive sway. Life is full of hopes dreams and successes. Until then, there is determination, and the winning streak. You conveyed the message beautifully There are no punctuation errors or things to improve on here. Good Luck in all you do.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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This little paragraph speaks volumes. You can feel Maria's determination The imagery of her dribbling of the ball down the court creates a positive sway. Life is full of hopes dreams and successes. Until then, there is determination, and the winning streak. You conveyed the message beautifully There are no punctuation errors or things to improve on here. Good Luck in all you do.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
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Comment from LJbutterfly
The moral of the story is...don't give up. Go back and try again and again. With determination, the outcome might be different. You managed all that meaning in such a short story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2024
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The moral of the story is...don't give up. Go back and try again and again. With determination, the outcome might be different. You managed all that meaning in such a short story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2024
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Comment from Crystal A Castaneda
Simple and joyful winning in the end. I like this little story it makes me think about a rewind button. Why don't we have one or a pause button, fast forward would be nice.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Simple and joyful winning in the end. I like this little story it makes me think about a rewind button. Why don't we have one or a pause button, fast forward would be nice.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
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Comment from Sallyo
That's an interesting idea... by refusing to accept reality, Maria changed it. This reminds me of a scene in Superman (one of the movies) where Lois gets killed and Superman unwinds time to save her. This works for Maria, but the flipside, of course, can lead to more problems. Refusing to accept reality is only useful if there is a real chance to change it.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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That's an interesting idea... by refusing to accept reality, Maria changed it. This reminds me of a scene in Superman (one of the movies) where Lois gets killed and Superman unwinds time to save her. This works for Maria, but the flipside, of course, can lead to more problems. Refusing to accept reality is only useful if there is a real chance to change it.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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Comment from royowen
How wonderful, I was a competitive sportsman when young, both individual and team, I would love to reverse some results, but I suspect this wasn't necessarily about sport, well done Nicole, good luck, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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How wonderful, I was a competitive sportsman when young, both individual and team, I would love to reverse some results, but I suspect this wasn't necessarily about sport, well done Nicole, good luck, Roy
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2024
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