The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from karenina
"I am woman, hear me roar in numbers too big to ignore!"
I was cheering when Lorrie stepped in and set those manly men straight!
Uh-uh.
No WAY are the men folk deciding what the women folk should do!
(Okay--I get the demons being scary, but an angry group of women? That's petrifying!)
You realize, of course, that it's bedtime and I'm definitely going to read "just one more" chapter...
(Which is what I told myself two chapters ago!)
(Smile)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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"I am woman, hear me roar in numbers too big to ignore!"
I was cheering when Lorrie stepped in and set those manly men straight!
Uh-uh.
No WAY are the men folk deciding what the women folk should do!
(Okay--I get the demons being scary, but an angry group of women? That's petrifying!)
You realize, of course, that it's bedtime and I'm definitely going to read "just one more" chapter...
(Which is what I told myself two chapters ago!)
(Smile)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Helen noted that I always put strong women in my stories...I guess I let a little of me rub off at times. They have their soft moments but when it's needed....LOOK OUT!
SMILES AND HUGS...
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It takes ONE to write ONE! You've slayed dragons in your life...with one arm tied behind your back!
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Only the strong survive!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, Lorrie is really brave, I don't think I would want to go. Not that I'm a scaredy-cat, you understand, more a worrier. Lol. You really do set the scene, Carol, and it is fabulous, nail-biting stuff! I really love your story. Off to the next chapter. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Oh dear, Lorrie is really brave, I don't think I would want to go. Not that I'm a scaredy-cat, you understand, more a worrier. Lol. You really do set the scene, Carol, and it is fabulous, nail-biting stuff! I really love your story. Off to the next chapter. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I did read these yesterday, but I wasn't feeling well so I waited until this morning to write you back. I am glad to hear you felt the tension in this chapter. I always worry whether what's in my head every truly hits the page. thanks as always.
Smiles and love, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Loving it and hating to take the time to write a review...but they all count towards your grand finish. I can feel it coming...
The anticipation is building well. Esther
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Loving it and hating to take the time to write a review...but they all count towards your grand finish. I can feel it coming...
The anticipation is building well. Esther
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hello, Esther...My apologies for the delay in responding to your review but life's dramas always seem to get into the way. I appreciate your review and hope that you too are doing okay.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
As always your women characters are strong - ghost or not! I'm glad they will stay together. I can't quite fathom what harm one spiritual being can do to another. But I'm glad that Sebastian quoted Psalm 23!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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As always your women characters are strong - ghost or not! I'm glad they will stay together. I can't quite fathom what harm one spiritual being can do to another. But I'm glad that Sebastian quoted Psalm 23!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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I love that Psalm and it has led me through so many times of darkness. Yes, I do like to portray my women characters as being strong and capable of standing on their own, still knowing that there are times we must lean on others too. Appreciate your thoughts and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, BeginAgain. Carol, right?
I like the glow surrounding
Sebastian
This is so interesting because of the ghosts
In the story
I really like this part about the icy fingers on the spine
" Icy fingers of fear strummed her spine as snippets of the evil spirits nagged in her memory"
It looks like the next chapter is going be pretty exciting
I'm assuming that's when all the actions are going to take place
This is a well written story I enjoyed reading it
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Hi, BeginAgain. Carol, right?
I like the glow surrounding
Sebastian
This is so interesting because of the ghosts
In the story
I really like this part about the icy fingers on the spine
" Icy fingers of fear strummed her spine as snippets of the evil spirits nagged in her memory"
It looks like the next chapter is going be pretty exciting
I'm assuming that's when all the actions are going to take place
This is a well written story I enjoyed reading it
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much Pam for stopping by to read and comment on my story. I apologize for the delay in my answering back, but drama always seems to get in the way. I appreciate your your thoughts and comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
They seem to be doing the 3 Musketeers motto: One for all and all for one. They are all going into the ballroom to find the picture of the soldier they need, and Sebastian has to hold back the evil spirits until they all escape. It does not sound like a plan made in heaven.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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They seem to be doing the 3 Musketeers motto: One for all and all for one. They are all going into the ballroom to find the picture of the soldier they need, and Sebastian has to hold back the evil spirits until they all escape. It does not sound like a plan made in heaven.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Sorry, Carol....My apologies for not responding to your review and so many others. I've been struggling with life both here on Fanstory and at home...the drama is overwhelming. But I do thank you for taking the time to continue to read and enjoy the story.
Smiles, Carol
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Never worry about when you get to writing. I have been struggling with the death of my brilliant grandson and arranging the memorial service etc. I just hope I've made sense when I did review things.
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Oh Carol I am so sorry to hear about your grandson. I know how difficult that can be for you and the family. My heart and prayers are with you always. I pray you remain strong and can endure this horrible time.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Another fine chapter, drawing the readers to the inevitable final battle for their souls, and for the treasure. It's quite dramatic, and there is a sense of something impending - hope it is good and not evil which will triumph.
Wendy.
Edits x2: Sebastian spelling: Still wary of everyone, Esther stood behind Sebastion. When her grandson addressed her, she moved from Sebastion's shadow and faced Billy.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Another fine chapter, drawing the readers to the inevitable final battle for their souls, and for the treasure. It's quite dramatic, and there is a sense of something impending - hope it is good and not evil which will triumph.
Wendy.
Edits x2: Sebastian spelling: Still wary of everyone, Esther stood behind Sebastion. When her grandson addressed her, she moved from Sebastion's shadow and faced Billy.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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thanks...I've noticed lately that my fingers or my brain decide things should be spelled differently...a loose cog I think! LOL thanks for catching the errors and pointing them out.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Teri7
You said five for six minutes.
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This is another really good chapter you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue between the ones speaking. Looking forward to more! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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You said five for six minutes.
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This is another really good chapter you have penned. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue between the ones speaking. Looking forward to more! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Fixed and thank you!
Appreciate the help and your comments. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is one of the most detailed and well thought out novels that I have ever read. The descriptions are plentiful and clear, and dialogue is realistic and forever moving the story forward. I am really enjoying my time with your ghosts.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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This is one of the most detailed and well thought out novels that I have ever read. The descriptions are plentiful and clear, and dialogue is realistic and forever moving the story forward. I am really enjoying my time with your ghosts.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Your flattery will get you everywhere, Lorraine....especially a piece of my heart. I was so terrified when I started this story but your encouragement and the others has meant so much. Thank you for continuing to support my efforts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
I love how you have chosen to have the spirits and mortals work together to solve the mystery. I have faith in your writing that you will bring everybody safely through the ordeal.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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I love how you have chosen to have the spirits and mortals work together to solve the mystery. I have faith in your writing that you will bring everybody safely through the ordeal.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Drawing families and friends together as they work on the problem seems like the right thing to do. Unfortunately, in real life, we are losing a lot of that "glue". Thanks so much, April as always.
Smiles, Carol