2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and the scenario you describe sounds like one of my childhood fears com to pass----of course it wouldn't be much different now
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and the scenario you describe sounds like one of my childhood fears com to pass----of course it wouldn't be much different now
Comment Written 11-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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LoL
Mike,
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Natural disasters do happen, and it seems, often, that the children are struck hardest. Maybe we focus on them because they're so young. This is another wonder presentation and poem.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Natural disasters do happen, and it seems, often, that the children are struck hardest. Maybe we focus on them because they're so young. This is another wonder presentation and poem.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
That would be scary for anyone no matter the age. But you move the reader's compassion by setting the scene of the school with young kindergarteners and the visual of little backpacks floating away.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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That would be scary for anyone no matter the age. But you move the reader's compassion by setting the scene of the school with young kindergarteners and the visual of little backpacks floating away.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate your detailed reviews you give great feedback.
Love
Marival
Gypsy
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You give great details! 💖
Comment from RJ Heritage
The images of this Haiku pair are very striking, and compliment the words very well. The power and destruction left in the wake of a storm is a very horrifying thing to see. The small floating bag packs attest to the fact that storms do not discriminate, anything in its path must capitulate.
RJ
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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The images of this Haiku pair are very striking, and compliment the words very well. The power and destruction left in the wake of a storm is a very horrifying thing to see. The small floating bag packs attest to the fact that storms do not discriminate, anything in its path must capitulate.
RJ
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
Gypsy
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You're welcome
Comment from Ricky1024
This haiku contest club entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Artwork defines the .message.
Thanks for sharing your haiku club entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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This haiku contest club entry was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Artwork defines the .message.
Thanks for sharing your haiku club entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Dr ricky
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
frighten children <- i think this should be past tense (frightened children hear roaring...)
a great haiku suite - like the image of the little backpacks floating by
nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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frighten children <- i think this should be past tense (frightened children hear roaring...)
a great haiku suite - like the image of the little backpacks floating by
nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley. I always appreciate your help with grammar.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a really great haiku you have penned about the frightened children. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you chose. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Gypsy, This is a really great haiku you have penned about the frightened children. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you chose. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Teri
Gypsy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A quite terrifying scene dramatically expanded upon in these haikus and depicted in the visual. However, I would just suggest 2 edits: frighten(ed) and raging waves (destroy -without the 's'). Thanks for sharing, Gypsy. Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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A quite terrifying scene dramatically expanded upon in these haikus and depicted in the visual. However, I would just suggest 2 edits: frighten(ed) and raging waves (destroy -without the 's'). Thanks for sharing, Gypsy. Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Debbie. I always appreciate grammar help.
Gypsy
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
Yes the mighty ocean is a nurtured of life and yet can be a destroyer of life, perhaps it gets angry with the mariner who dares to venture into its domain, couldn't blame it, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Yes the mighty ocean is a nurtured of life and yet can be a destroyer of life, perhaps it gets angry with the mariner who dares to venture into its domain, couldn't blame it, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
Yes the mighty ocean is a nurtured of life and yet can be a destroyer of life, perhaps it gets angry with the mariner who dares to venture into its domain, couldn't blame it, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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Yes the mighty ocean is a nurtured of life and yet can be a destroyer of life, perhaps it gets angry with the mariner who dares to venture into its domain, couldn't blame it, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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I got 2 reviews for same post... lol. The something happened to Shelley
Thank you very much, Roy
Gypsy
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Amazing