Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Checking On Artie"Young girl with special abilities.
16 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
It is good Artie only had a little damage and is alright. Heddy is a good kid and she admits she can't bring herself to pray for Mrs Collette. Still she feels guilty for wishing she was dead. No one scolds her for saying that.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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It is good Artie only had a little damage and is alright. Heddy is a good kid and she admits she can't bring herself to pray for Mrs Collette. Still she feels guilty for wishing she was dead. No one scolds her for saying that.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Beth. I appreciate this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I like all the extra facts that you put in each chapter, like the fact that her dad stepped on glass and had to have stitches. It's interesting that Artie would know about the postmaster and her mean ways. She must have been really hurt in the past. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I like all the extra facts that you put in each chapter, like the fact that her dad stepped on glass and had to have stitches. It's interesting that Artie would know about the postmaster and her mean ways. She must have been really hurt in the past. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Artie had lived elsewhere on the island but got threatened so he "left" but actually hid in Dr. Monroe's abandoned house. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like Colette has a reputation that has spread and most people know of her mean character, even Artie who is somewhat isolated. I enjoyed the friendship he and Heddy have together as they both see the good in each other. Another fine chapter Gretchen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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It sounds like Colette has a reputation that has spread and most people know of her mean character, even Artie who is somewhat isolated. I enjoyed the friendship he and Heddy have together as they both see the good in each other. Another fine chapter Gretchen, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. I like the pair of them as well. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Again, you have a wonderful chapter as life moves on for Heddy. Her family survived the hurricane, Lester is broken-hearted over his father's death, Artie survived the hurricane with only one broken window, and Heddy is wondering if Nonni has a point about praying for bad people also.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Again, you have a wonderful chapter as life moves on for Heddy. Her family survived the hurricane, Lester is broken-hearted over his father's death, Artie survived the hurricane with only one broken window, and Heddy is wondering if Nonni has a point about praying for bad people also.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Carol. This was a very nice review. Gretchen
Comment from tfawcus
Your description of the relationship between characters through the dialogue is skilful and believable. There are some lovely passages of writing, too.
I particularly liked this paragraph: I see thin strands of silver that seem to play peek-a-boo with the sunlight that streams through the kitchen window. She looks like a princess. "Daddy's gonna like you even more with your hair down like that."
I think 'under tow' is one word. It is on this side of the Pacific anyway!
An enjoyable read and well worth the sixth star.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Your description of the relationship between characters through the dialogue is skilful and believable. There are some lovely passages of writing, too.
I particularly liked this paragraph: I see thin strands of silver that seem to play peek-a-boo with the sunlight that streams through the kitchen window. She looks like a princess. "Daddy's gonna like you even more with your hair down like that."
I think 'under tow' is one word. It is on this side of the Pacific anyway!
An enjoyable read and well worth the sixth star.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you for this detailed review. I really appreciate the feedback. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
No, you can't fault anyone for telling the truth, but that doesn't mean that anyone truly wants to hear it, truth or not. Most times, people just want to hear the praises, deserved or not. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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No, you can't fault anyone for telling the truth, but that doesn't mean that anyone truly wants to hear it, truth or not. Most times, people just want to hear the praises, deserved or not. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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I would rather hear the truth because I don't have time to waste on lies. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
I love that everyone made it through the storm. Heddy does not want to pray for Mrs. Colette, and the fact that she feels a pang of guilt, for me, deepens her character. It's fun to watch her grow and change as the story progresses.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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I love that everyone made it through the storm. Heddy does not want to pray for Mrs. Colette, and the fact that she feels a pang of guilt, for me, deepens her character. It's fun to watch her grow and change as the story progresses.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you, John. She is changing despite her best effort to dig her heels in the sand and resist. Lol. I really appreciate your continued supportive reviews. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
I am glad they are all safe after the storm, but still feeling for Lester; his aunt is very mean-spirited. I like Heddy's honesty, and also how she struggles with ethical, moral and spiritual questions, but does not shape herself to suit the expectations of others. Well written and enjoyable chapter.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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I am glad they are all safe after the storm, but still feeling for Lester; his aunt is very mean-spirited. I like Heddy's honesty, and also how she struggles with ethical, moral and spiritual questions, but does not shape herself to suit the expectations of others. Well written and enjoyable chapter.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you. Heddy knows what is expected of her but she's a tad stubborn and still sees the world as black and white. Those lines are blurring though. Thank you for this wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"I see thin strands of silver that seem to play peek-a-boo with the sunlight that streams through the kitchen window" ..... beautiful imagery.
I love your Saltwater Ghosts book. The characters are endearing, except Lester's aunt, she is an awful person.
I love to search for beach treasures. I used to do it all the time, before I gave my car to my son. But after a big storm I would be afraid of what I may find.
Well done, Gretchen, you are my favorite author in fanstory... a great story teller.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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"I see thin strands of silver that seem to play peek-a-boo with the sunlight that streams through the kitchen window" ..... beautiful imagery.
I love your Saltwater Ghosts book. The characters are endearing, except Lester's aunt, she is an awful person.
I love to search for beach treasures. I used to do it all the time, before I gave my car to my son. But after a big storm I would be afraid of what I may find.
Well done, Gretchen, you are my favorite author in fanstory... a great story teller.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Dang, Gypsy, you got me choked up here. I really appreciate your comment, especially calling me a storyteller. I'm really enjoying Heddy's story. I'm pulling little bits of my own childhood in and dealing with things that have been burs under my own saddle. Writing is great therapy for that, isn't it. Thank you for this touching review and the kind words. Plus the stars. Gretchen
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You are welcome. It comes from the bottom of my heart.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another fine chapter carried by its excellent dialogue! I always love Heddy's honesty, whether it be about Lester or Mrs Collette in this case, it's always a welcome read. Just some little suggestions:
Come (on). Lunch is ready.
I also wondered about contractions in some of the dialogue:
Oh (I'm) sorry to hear this; (I'll) pray for Lester..
Thanks for sharing this enjoyable read, Gretchen. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Another fine chapter carried by its excellent dialogue! I always love Heddy's honesty, whether it be about Lester or Mrs Collette in this case, it's always a welcome read. Just some little suggestions:
Come (on). Lunch is ready.
I also wondered about contractions in some of the dialogue:
Oh (I'm) sorry to hear this; (I'll) pray for Lester..
Thanks for sharing this enjoyable read, Gretchen. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Since Artie uses English as his second language, he may not use contractions like us. I really didn't want him to sound too American. Thank you so much for this awesome review. Gretchen