Crack Up Job
Roger's unfortunate experience.3 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Crack Up Job, has the proper word count and makes one think that Roger had both the worst luck in the world and very worse realtor and cleaning service. (Ten years?
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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This one-hundred-word story, Crack Up Job, has the proper word count and makes one think that Roger had both the worst luck in the world and very worse realtor and cleaning service. (Ten years?
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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The ten years was to signify a time elapsed to explain that his body wasn't discovered till years later.
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I was just wondering how the body lay in the foyer with his head on the fan for a decade -- unnoticed.
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I was just wondering how the body lay in the foyer with his head on the fan for a decade -- unnoticed.
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You are right, in my mind it was clear, but I failed to mention it was a fixer-upper that he was working on. I will make sure to mention that in the edit. Thank you.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
His torn and decapitated skull embedded into the blades circled the ceiling as his body rotted on the floor below.
Nice use of imagery here. All the best going forward.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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His torn and decapitated skull embedded into the blades circled the ceiling as his body rotted on the floor below.
Nice use of imagery here. All the best going forward.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thank you
Comment from kahpot
Ouch! how bad it would be to find that poor man's body for those newlyweds, let alone poor Roger, very well written, the buildup is excellent, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Ouch! how bad it would be to find that poor man's body for those newlyweds, let alone poor Roger, very well written, the buildup is excellent, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thank you