Jersey's World
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "JW - Part 2"A stripper and a murder.
2 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A very engaging chapter, my friend!! Your main character is believable and engaging. You see her current situation and her aspirations. We, also, find out she's a blogger.
Of course, what catches your attention first is the crime scene. Great job of detailing it without getting too gory.
You introduce a character, sort of on the sly, that is a politician. Related to the case? Must be.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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A very engaging chapter, my friend!! Your main character is believable and engaging. You see her current situation and her aspirations. We, also, find out she's a blogger.
Of course, what catches your attention first is the crime scene. Great job of detailing it without getting too gory.
You introduce a character, sort of on the sly, that is a politician. Related to the case? Must be.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you kindly.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
The face was a bloody mess and the torso and thighs were covered in cuts and bruises. There were no clothes to be seen. There was something in the corpse's mouth, but it too was covered in blood. The scene was something out of "Silence of the Lambs."
The imagery is great throughout the whole story. Did a good job of grabbing my interest in keeping it. This was a very good section.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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The face was a bloody mess and the torso and thighs were covered in cuts and bruises. There were no clothes to be seen. There was something in the corpse's mouth, but it too was covered in blood. The scene was something out of "Silence of the Lambs."
The imagery is great throughout the whole story. Did a good job of grabbing my interest in keeping it. This was a very good section.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thank you kindly.