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Lair Of The Seductress

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Book Four Wolf Bend Series

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Comment from Soledadpaz
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Perhaps: (They) were nothing more than budget . . .

Perhaps expand on 'After dialing.' Who or where did he dial?

Maybe more body language from Jesse while he's on the phone?

This chapter is full of intensity. You can feel the wife's anxiety of not knowing where he has gotten to. Nice touch of her wanting his jacket for the comfort it provides her.

Sol

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
    Thank you so much These are most excellent indeed. Gold, my friend. Gold!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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Your plot is ever changing which keeps the reader very involved: "I'm scared. Greg left sometime in the night and never came home."

"I know. I got your message and came as quickly as I could." Jesse ran his hands through his thick black hair. "Central Dispatch said he took a call after midnight. Seems Officer Katie's boyfriend disappeared and she went on a bender at the Stonefish Bar. Greg advised that he would handle it and now both of them are missing." I have a feeling we will see more about the dagger maybe in the next chapter. Well developed.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
    The plot weaves around the bad guy (girl). Plus I spun the last book in the series bad guy into this book in an earlier chapter. We are nearing the climactic end. Hope not literally for Greg?.cause that would mean he dies. Ha!
reply by Liz O'Neill on 03-Jun-2024
    I'll have to look earlier into this book I'm trying to think I'm reading something of yours right now but maybe this can be my next book.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I like your style here, Doug, keeping the mystery going after we know that Greg is in grave danger. Now they're going equipped with the blade which may have magical powers perhaps to tackle the evil Lilith? Small edit below:
An unaware Greg walked into her tr(a)p
Another excellent and very readable chapter, Doug! Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    Thank you! Nice catch. I appreciate your kindness!
Comment from royowen
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I wonder if the knife that was found is used by Lilith in her ceremonial slaying of her victims? But I think Greg was at Lilith's mercy, I'm glad to know he escaped, this is a great post Douglas, I haven't heard from you lately, well dine, blessings Roy
Typo : Unaware Greg walked into her tr(a)p.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    I have not been on much this month. Finishing the inside of my pole barn is quite time consuming.
reply by royowen on 07-Jun-2024
    I can imagine, well done
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Douglas, The story is rolling along nicely. And now they are well on their way to find Greg. And they are are taking the blade with them! I can't wait to reading on. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    Thank you!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Jesse and Jenny are off to find Greg. YEA!!!! Help is coming. Hang on a little longer. I can't wait to read how they rescue Greg. I really like this story, but you know that.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    I really appreciate the sixer! Made my day, friend. Let's see what happens!
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
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"What Greg finds awakens him to the realization that more bad things are coming for him and his little town."

What a sense of despair that must be. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    Thanks for stopping in, Nicole!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Yay! I'm glad that they're taking the sword along.
This is another well-written chapter. Good work.
Sounds like things are about to wrap up.
Good luck with the story.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    Thanks, Wayne We are getting close to the end.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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The picture leads me to believe that the blade is used in rituals. With Lilith's history it would make sense, but??? why wasit where they found it if SHE has the two of them somewhere?, not that you would have drawn it f

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
    Why indeed!