The Strap 'Cross Me Bum
This never happened, not because my Mum was an old softie, b6 total reviews
Comment from Esther Brown
Golly good poem. I bet you were a rascal when you were young. You must be "old and weathered" to appreciate this poem I guess. Been writing for at least 30 years? And published? Supporting yourself writing and now retired maybe? I'm curious. I have always wanted to write but never did more than play at it and now I am in my 70's. Esther
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Golly good poem. I bet you were a rascal when you were young. You must be "old and weathered" to appreciate this poem I guess. Been writing for at least 30 years? And published? Supporting yourself writing and now retired maybe? I'm curious. I have always wanted to write but never did more than play at it and now I am in my 70's. Esther
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Esther, never allow age to control what you do or think. It is just a number. A restricting one at that, I do agree. I too am in my seventies, a '48 babe. And I love writing, these days mostly poetry. Thank you so much for reviewing my work.
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Thanks. I have been so encouraged. Esther
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Esther, allow me to say just one thing. Go for it. Firstly, for your own pleasure and secondly, to satisfy the desire to write and finally, for the feeling of accomplishment completion brings. It feels really good to say, "I'm published.' Again, go for it. And good luck.
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Seriously, I am chicken to think about trying to get published. I am so new at putting my thoughts out for criticism. Kind-of like murdering your own children if no one likes it. Especially when it comes to your own life story. I wrote my First Half African Son his story for his birthday (several chapters here) and it blew me away when all he said was "interesting". I then became the Queen of Denial for a bit. Slowly recovering.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Well I have no reason to doubt a word you say about this. After all I have heard such wonderful things about the nuns in school and all the fun. Yes, I am not catholic but I heard even some perfect kids such as yourself gets it just in case.
Just kidding.
This was fun. You did a great job telling the story in a rhyming poem. My favorite kind. But I am a little curious about the rhyming words on top. Were they there for a purpose? No big deal, and great job, Bob! Love, Debi
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Well I have no reason to doubt a word you say about this. After all I have heard such wonderful things about the nuns in school and all the fun. Yes, I am not catholic but I heard even some perfect kids such as yourself gets it just in case.
Just kidding.
This was fun. You did a great job telling the story in a rhyming poem. My favorite kind. But I am a little curious about the rhyming words on top. Were they there for a purpose? No big deal, and great job, Bob! Love, Debi
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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This was a working page, it wasn't supposed to be posted. Sometimes I list potential rhymes while I'm struggling in the writing process. It's supposed to be erased prior to posting. Just inattention to detail on my part. Sorry about that
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That is what I thought, so was hoping you wouldn't mind if I mentioned it in case you didn't realize it was still there. Yes, that is a tool of mine too so I figure so.
Great job on poem tho. Very funny!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I understand being parochialized twelve years. ð?«?
Between the ruler tapped knuckles
And pulled
Ears Perhas they would have been less fearing in white
The worse
Was
A
Priest who had all 100 lbs of me squat in front of a
Classmarms
Extended holding two history books and each time I bent at the elbow he would
Knuckle me on the skull
I left that class never to speak in class again
I hope
You have been well as
I haven't heard from
You in a while
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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I understand being parochialized twelve years. ð?«?
Between the ruler tapped knuckles
And pulled
Ears Perhas they would have been less fearing in white
The worse
Was
A
Priest who had all 100 lbs of me squat in front of a
Classmarms
Extended holding two history books and each time I bent at the elbow he would
Knuckle me on the skull
I left that class never to speak in class again
I hope
You have been well as
I haven't heard from
You in a while
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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They sure were tough and dedicated. Either that, or just cruel bastards. But I survived. Just.
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Amen. Between the clergy and the service (Navy) discipline was ingrained within and allowed me success where others fell short.
Comment from kahpot
They say that drinking alcohol can bring out the worst in people, but never thought about nuns, for me it was dads thick black police belt, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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They say that drinking alcohol can bring out the worst in people, but never thought about nuns, for me it was dads thick black police belt, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Thank you for a great revue. My father only had to give us 'that look.' And we knew. He didn't mind a drink either. Wouldn't have swapped him though.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Haha! I've heard all about those nuns and their nonsense after a drink or two! But of course this is only fiction because you were so perfect! Love that last line and "the strap 'cross me bum." I had the ruler across the back of my knees by my teacher who swore (sadistically) this was the most painful place. He also felt our pulse (in front of the whole class) to check first we were guilty! Remarkable method, should be used in a court of law! I enjoyed your fun rhyming verse, Bob, although I don't understand the need for the first 4 lines or the title in the text box. I think your poem would have shone better without them and in slightly larger font. But nicely done! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Haha! I've heard all about those nuns and their nonsense after a drink or two! But of course this is only fiction because you were so perfect! Love that last line and "the strap 'cross me bum." I had the ruler across the back of my knees by my teacher who swore (sadistically) this was the most painful place. He also felt our pulse (in front of the whole class) to check first we were guilty! Remarkable method, should be used in a court of law! I enjoyed your fun rhyming verse, Bob, although I don't understand the need for the first 4 lines or the title in the text box. I think your poem would have shone better without them and in slightly larger font. But nicely done! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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I don't question either the nuns and the brothers or their dedication. But their fondness for the cane certainly didn't endear them to the students.
Comment from royowen
Yes, I agree with you, I was so impervious to the pain train, it merely became the pain drain, even though I was never evil or bad, just merely rambunctious, I received the cuts so many times, I became immune. But pain works, whereas lines were just...inconvenient, well done Bob, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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Yes, I agree with you, I was so impervious to the pain train, it merely became the pain drain, even though I was never evil or bad, just merely rambunctious, I received the cuts so many times, I became immune. But pain works, whereas lines were just...inconvenient, well done Bob, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 31-May-2024
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And I always assumed you were just like me, the perfect student. Aren't the memories good?
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Never the perfect, but I try to listen to God
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Hah hah