Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

This is a dark poem of when one's mind has been seized by darkness. It sounds hopeless. Your picture adds a serious creep factor to it.
I might suggest doing something to make it easier to read...maybe bold the red, or switch to black font.

Julie

 Comment Written 26-May-2024

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reply by the author on 26-May-2024

Thank you for reviewing and for your suggestion. I changed the lettering to black and lightened the background.

reply by Julie Helms on 26-May-2024

Looks perfect!

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi. Did you make your poem extremely hard to read? Is it because you are trying to illustrate darkness?

You have to consider your readers. I could not read at all until I peered a long time AFTER enlarging it quite a bit.

Wouldn't you rather that I be reading your poem instead of stressing over the font and how I am going to read it?

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.

I checked your syllable count, and it is all correct

Good job thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 26-May-2024

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reply by the author on 26-May-2024

Thank you for reviewing. I am sorry if it seemed like I wasn't considering my readers. I changed the text to black and lightened the background.