Comment from bob cullen

Excellent

Cleverly written. I see on your notes it says you run your own poetry business. What exactly is a poetry business? Do you write poetry for a living? What a great job? Good luck.

 Comment Written 25-May-2024

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reply by the author on 26-May-2024

I wrote poems for all occasions (hence the name Occasional Poems) and printed and framed them in matching frames (Halloween poems in spooky frames, Thanksgiving poems in fall-looking frames, etc.). I would set up at craft fairs and sell them. I also made my own rhyming greeting cards, special snowflake Christmas ornaments with poems in the center, and I took orders for personalized poems. People would give me background on the person they ordered for & I'd create a poem for them--birthdays, anniversaries, baby births, mother's & father's Day, weddings, etc. I did this for quite awhile, but then got busy with other commitments and didn't have time to travel to craft fairs. It was fun--still have boxes of frames & poems packed up.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

That sounds like a typical day perhaps especially for FS poets. Well thought through and well presented. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 23-May-2024

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reply by the author on 24-May-2024

Thanks so much!

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi. This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.!

I thought you could say morning rather than A.M

I think it is a good take on what life is like. So much to do and no time to do it!! When we finally get time to do it we are too exhausted

Well done. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 23-May-2024

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reply by the author on 24-May-2024

Thanks for your review and comments. I originally had morning instead of A.M., but since I used morning in the first line, I felt it was too repetitive.

Comment from GoWiSt

Excellent

Successfully met the line and syllable count requirements for this etheree poem contest.
Very creative how you employed the same end-line rhymes all through except for two lines--not easy at all.
The poem makes good sense as it describes a full day's worth of activities.
Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-May-2024

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reply by the author on 24-May-2024

Thanks so much!

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is a good poem for the challenge with a good supporting image. Many people will relate to this one. It seems when we finally sit down the whole day can hit us. We'll written.

Best wishes,

Alex

 Comment Written 23-May-2024

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reply by the author on 24-May-2024

Thank you so much!

Comment from Brenda Strauser

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. I've never seen this type of poem. That is quite a bit of numbers. You did a great job. I also liked the picture. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-May-2024

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reply by the author on 24-May-2024

Thanks so much!

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

I'm the opposite- slow and sluggish in the morning and livening up later. Friends know not to expect too much sense in the morning. I like the sense of slowing you've created with the dots

 Comment Written 23-May-2024

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reply by the author on 23-May-2024

Thank you so much!

Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

You successfully conveyed the rush of busyness in a morning, then as the day progresses, your ellipses indicate a little more pausing in between, till the...final...syllable. Very effective.
A good etheree for the prompt!
Julie

 Comment Written 22-May-2024

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reply by the author on 22-May-2024

Thank you so much--I was hoping that would be the impression conveyed.