Candy Lady
A Louisiana Tale3 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. This is a very eerie tale. You did a great job writing this and I enjoyed reading. I want to wish you the best of luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. This is a very eerie tale. You did a great job writing this and I enjoyed reading. I want to wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
That's quite the chilling tale! This starts off innocently enough, with the warm and familiar presence of Ms. Anna Arceneaux. I love how it takes a sharp turn into darkness as the story unfolds. The neighborhood's joyful innocence with the sinister events that are happening creates a sense of unease that lingers throughout the writing. The ending is truly chilling, with the emergence of Kooshma and the violence that follows. Well done!
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That's quite the chilling tale! This starts off innocently enough, with the warm and familiar presence of Ms. Anna Arceneaux. I love how it takes a sharp turn into darkness as the story unfolds. The neighborhood's joyful innocence with the sinister events that are happening creates a sense of unease that lingers throughout the writing. The ending is truly chilling, with the emergence of Kooshma and the violence that follows. Well done!
Comment Written 25-May-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Terrence
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that. !
Who is speaking here?you have quotation marks but have not mentioned a speaker.
" NORTHSIDE OF LAFAYETTE, LOUISIANA - DAY**
*The summer sun blazes down on a quaint neighborhood. Children run and play, laughter echoing through the streets.*"
Is it the narrator? Elsewhere when the narrator speaks, he/she is mentioned as such. Although I found another instance
I must have a mind bent to horror . I knew how this would end from the beginning. However the twist of Anna being first surprised me. That is a
good thing. It recreshes. Puts new life into the story. Congratulations. You have done that.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Hi, Terrence
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that. !
Who is speaking here?you have quotation marks but have not mentioned a speaker.
" NORTHSIDE OF LAFAYETTE, LOUISIANA - DAY**
*The summer sun blazes down on a quaint neighborhood. Children run and play, laughter echoing through the streets.*"
Is it the narrator? Elsewhere when the narrator speaks, he/she is mentioned as such. Although I found another instance
I must have a mind bent to horror . I knew how this would end from the beginning. However the twist of Anna being first surprised me. That is a
good thing. It recreshes. Puts new life into the story. Congratulations. You have done that.
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Thank you for the feedback, I will review it and make changes.
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Thank you for the feedback, I will review it and make changes.