SoFISHticated
Clyde the Dapper Goldfish fancied himself special2 total reviews
Comment from JanPerry
It's hard to put it altogether like the rules state and you have made a fair attempt.
"a dapper fish a little on the wild side." You put in an extra "on a" which is unnecessary.
"Baby fish would all gather "round" would sound better and rolls of the tongue instead of "around".
You keep reminding us he's a goldfish which we know from the beginning, so just say fish later.
A good attempt.
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It's hard to put it altogether like the rules state and you have made a fair attempt.
"a dapper fish a little on the wild side." You put in an extra "on a" which is unnecessary.
"Baby fish would all gather "round" would sound better and rolls of the tongue instead of "around".
You keep reminding us he's a goldfish which we know from the beginning, so just say fish later.
A good attempt.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem about Clyde is delightful. You share a charismatic character! Each stanza builds upon Clyde's personality. You show his charm and unique flair with poem that flows wonderfully. I love the image of him wearing a bow tie, making bubbles, and winking at the female goldfish. That's so funny and makes Clyde so memorable.
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Your poem about Clyde is delightful. You share a charismatic character! Each stanza builds upon Clyde's personality. You show his charm and unique flair with poem that flows wonderfully. I love the image of him wearing a bow tie, making bubbles, and winking at the female goldfish. That's so funny and makes Clyde so memorable.
Comment Written 21-May-2024