The Interloper
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Downfall Chap 3"a family sage told by the ignored one
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Poor Miriam, she was really stuck between a rock and a hard place, without even knowing it. I do hope she isn't abused by this powerful man. Her family will soon see how much she was doing at the farm, and in the house, that will come as a shock to them! I think there might be a time in the future that Miriam will need them, as much as they would need her back. Powerful chapter, Joan, I'm really enjoying this story. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
Poor Miriam, she was really stuck between a rock and a hard place, without even knowing it. I do hope she isn't abused by this powerful man. Her family will soon see how much she was doing at the farm, and in the house, that will come as a shock to them! I think there might be a time in the future that Miriam will need them, as much as they would need her back. Powerful chapter, Joan, I'm really enjoying this story. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thanks again Sandra.
Joan
Comment from royowen
I suppose our protagonist has good reasons to move out and live with Gunther, despite what Natalie thinks, but we tend to do what we want to, if our mind is made up, which it appears to be, beautifully written Joan, blessings. Roy
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
I suppose our protagonist has good reasons to move out and live with Gunther, despite what Natalie thinks, but we tend to do what we want to, if our mind is made up, which it appears to be, beautifully written Joan, blessings. Roy
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Hi Roy,
Thanks for your continued support and encouragement.
Joan
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Most welcome
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You have got my attention by writing about something I can relate to but the line structure is such that it is difficult to read. Please I suggest you edit this and change the sentence structure to make it easier to read.
Jesse
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
You have got my attention by writing about something I can relate to but the line structure is such that it is difficult to read. Please I suggest you edit this and change the sentence structure to make it easier to read.
Jesse
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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I will try to see what I can do to correct the problem, Jesse.
Joan. As you know, I am mainly a poet. I thought I try to spread my wings.
Joan
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I know It's difficult to switch from poetry to prose. Keep trying. You'll get it.
Jesse
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Thanks for the encouragement.
Joan