Rejected
A Distorted Diablo14 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
The devil has his hands in every facet of life. I prefer to be rejected by him daily as his temptations are real. Thank you for sharing your talent.
God bless.
Steve
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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The devil has his hands in every facet of life. I prefer to be rejected by him daily as his temptations are real. Thank you for sharing your talent.
God bless.
Steve
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Steve, thank you!
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My pleasure.
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Nice. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Nice. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Raul, thanks for your validation and review.
Comment from Erika Whittle
I like this poem that narrates a story. I find it funny that the devil kicked him out. I also would like to write a distorted Diablo so this was a good example for me. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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I like this poem that narrates a story. I find it funny that the devil kicked him out. I also would like to write a distorted Diablo so this was a good example for me. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 23-May-2024
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Erika, good success with yours please let me know when you post.
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I posted it! It's called Hell Fire
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Rejected, follows the untainted soul who has walked a wider highway than is necessary. Although not on a pearly gate route, the devil seems to be unimpressed with the low level of lowlife.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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This poem, Rejected, follows the untainted soul who has walked a wider highway than is necessary. Although not on a pearly gate route, the devil seems to be unimpressed with the low level of lowlife.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Yes, Bill, some are lower than the belly of snakes and just keep on crawling.
Comment from royowen
Well done with this Jim, you've done a marvellous job, its hard to work out why the devil is so stupid that he fell, cast out of heaven along with a third of the angels, silly old he, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Well done with this Jim, you've done a marvellous job, its hard to work out why the devil is so stupid that he fell, cast out of heaven along with a third of the angels, silly old he, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you very much.
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting how you used this form, the Distorted Diablo to cover the evil one's fall from heaven to become the tormenter for the human race ever since. An apt subject for the form!
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Interesting how you used this form, the Distorted Diablo to cover the evil one's fall from heaven to become the tormenter for the human race ever since. An apt subject for the form!
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Helen, thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Developing a thick skin is something we learn to do with experience in order to protect ourselves from outside forces. Best not to become too aggressive and overzealous like this guy in your story. This is an unusual post Jim and I have not heard of this form before, you were brave to try it, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Developing a thick skin is something we learn to do with experience in order to protect ourselves from outside forces. Best not to become too aggressive and overzealous like this guy in your story. This is an unusual post Jim and I have not heard of this form before, you were brave to try it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Dolly, this is the first time that I have seen this format. It makes you think for certain.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Nicely done in your rhyming free verse adhering to the form of the distorted diablo. I like the way you've kept to the theme and yet injected some fun and humour with this lost soul dropping in to meet the Devil. But it seems he's not up to the mark and, despite the Devil's initial excitement, this lad is sent back as he's far too "hum-drum." Some lovely imagery, particularly relating to the Devil and his flaring nostrils and rising smoke. An excellent entry for the club. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Nicely done in your rhyming free verse adhering to the form of the distorted diablo. I like the way you've kept to the theme and yet injected some fun and humour with this lost soul dropping in to meet the Devil. But it seems he's not up to the mark and, despite the Devil's initial excitement, this lad is sent back as he's far too "hum-drum." Some lovely imagery, particularly relating to the Devil and his flaring nostrils and rising smoke. An excellent entry for the club. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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My sincere thanks!
Comment from shelley kaye
lol a great distorted diablo poem
fun, interesting, and quick read with smooth flow and rhyme and good imagery
like the lines about staring and wagging his finger!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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lol a great distorted diablo poem
fun, interesting, and quick read with smooth flow and rhyme and good imagery
like the lines about staring and wagging his finger!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you for your comments Shelley Kaye.
Comment from gansach
The distorted Diablo style of poetry was very interesting to me. Your lines and syllable count are all spot on, I like your rhyme scheme. The chosen artwork fits the poem well. I enjoyed it very much. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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The distorted Diablo style of poetry was very interesting to me. Your lines and syllable count are all spot on, I like your rhyme scheme. The chosen artwork fits the poem well. I enjoyed it very much. Well done!
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you for your validation, I found this format enjoyable to play with.
