Better Things to Do
A 100 word story10 total reviews
Comment from Jill D
This was one of the bedtime stories last night with a bit of editing on the last paragraph..Lol. Charlie and Oscar wanted to know what happened then.. what could I say except 'let's just wait and see if there are more tales of Jimmy and Fuggs':)
All the best Jill.
reply by the author on 24-May-2024
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This was one of the bedtime stories last night with a bit of editing on the last paragraph..Lol. Charlie and Oscar wanted to know what happened then.. what could I say except 'let's just wait and see if there are more tales of Jimmy and Fuggs':)
All the best Jill.
Comment Written 24-May-2024
reply by the author on 24-May-2024
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I am surprised?and delighted?to have any work read as a bedtime story. I will see if I can dream up further adventures for Jimmy and Fuggs. Many thanks! Rod
Comment from Wendy G
lol. Well done. No I guess the new teacher won't miss him as he spends his time learning about aerodynamics with his kite. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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lol. Well done. No I guess the new teacher won't miss him as he spends his time learning about aerodynamics with his kite. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Hi, Wendy. Thank you for sharing and praising my shortie. Rod
Comment from jessizero
This was a charming description of a lazy day off for a kid and his puppy. I enjoyed reading this very much. You used your words well and painted quite a picture with your descriptions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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This was a charming description of a lazy day off for a kid and his puppy. I enjoyed reading this very much. You used your words well and painted quite a picture with your descriptions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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I am delighted you enjoyed my story, jessi. Thank you for your kind praise.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Sounds like this kid is going to grow up skipping a good amount of school. He is chill and taking the time to enjoy himself while spending time with his best friend.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Sounds like this kid is going to grow up skipping a good amount of school. He is chill and taking the time to enjoy himself while spending time with his best friend.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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You might be right, Mia. But you have to admit he had his priorities right that particular day. Thanks for sharing my story.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Better Things to Do, has the proper word count and finds the first-day school skipper enjoying the freedom of one more sunny day.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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This one-hundred-word story, Better Things to Do, has the proper word count and finds the first-day school skipper enjoying the freedom of one more sunny day.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thanks, Bill, for sharing my story. I?m thinking that kid will remember THAT day the rest of his life.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The Ghosts of Creepy Hollow. The boy and his dog are no longer on the ground but are instead kite-flying spirits; Spirits can do that to an individual when they are in heaven looking down at the school.
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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The Ghosts of Creepy Hollow. The boy and his dog are no longer on the ground but are instead kite-flying spirits; Spirits can do that to an individual when they are in heaven looking down at the school.
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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An interesting interpretation. Thank you, Rosemary, for sharing my story.
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What is your interpretation of your story? Were they not spirits?
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No, they are not spirits. They are a boy, his dog, and a kite on a hill playing hooky from school.
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okay.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely, evocative scene complementing that delightful image! I had the feeling he should have been somewhere else but, hey, on such a warm and gently breezy day, he's forgiven for wanting to make the most of it. All nicely and neatly fitting in to that economic word prompt. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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A lovely, evocative scene complementing that delightful image! I had the feeling he should have been somewhere else but, hey, on such a warm and gently breezy day, he's forgiven for wanting to make the most of it. All nicely and neatly fitting in to that economic word prompt. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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I?m glad you enjoyed my shortie, Debbie. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was great. I love how you show childhood freedom in your writing. I could see Jimmy's moment of relaxation with Fuggs. The mention of the school nearby hints that maybe Jimmy should be at school! I really enjoyed watching Jimmy enjoy flying a kite and enjoying a sandwich with his beloved pet. Nicely done - with so few words especially!
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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I thought this was great. I love how you show childhood freedom in your writing. I could see Jimmy's moment of relaxation with Fuggs. The mention of the school nearby hints that maybe Jimmy should be at school! I really enjoyed watching Jimmy enjoy flying a kite and enjoying a sandwich with his beloved pet. Nicely done - with so few words especially!
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Thank you, Michael, for the great review of my shortie. Childhood freedom is perhaps my strongest memory.
Comment from lancellot
This is an interesting idea. You took the picture and detailed a possible story that may have inspired it. And, yes what you have feels pretty accurate. Good idea. This may set your entry apart from the rest.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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This is an interesting idea. You took the picture and detailed a possible story that may have inspired it. And, yes what you have feels pretty accurate. Good idea. This may set your entry apart from the rest.
Good luck.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you, lancellot, for sharing my shortie. Indeed the picture inspired the story.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Flash 100 writing prompt. Great story with such a nostalgic feel. Between the story and the picture posted, it could have come from my old grammar school book, "Fun with Dick and Jane". Skipping school was always a good time! Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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An excellent entry for the Flash 100 writing prompt. Great story with such a nostalgic feel. Between the story and the picture posted, it could have come from my old grammar school book, "Fun with Dick and Jane". Skipping school was always a good time! Good luck.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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"Fun with Dick & Jane" really brings back memories. Thank you so much, Marilyn, for your high praise of my shortie.
