Loser
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Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Loser, has the proper word count and gives a narration of a woman with a tragic wound that has made her defective in her former lover's eyes. Her wish for her blind friend's eyes is ironic.
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This one-hundred-word story, Loser, has the proper word count and gives a narration of a woman with a tragic wound that has made her defective in her former lover's eyes. Her wish for her blind friend's eyes is ironic.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
Comment from RodG
Your story evokes pathos for both the narrator and her former lover who cannot look at her without a "dreadful stare." When she sees that look, she envies her blind friend. One hopes that somehow the pity party will end and she will find someone who "sees" beyond her tragic loss. Rod
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Your story evokes pathos for both the narrator and her former lover who cannot look at her without a "dreadful stare." When she sees that look, she envies her blind friend. One hopes that somehow the pity party will end and she will find someone who "sees" beyond her tragic loss. Rod
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Thank you. When possible, I like to write about the human condition. It's a bit harder in a flash story.