2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Gypsy
Typo in the second line, should be "destitute"
Maybe it's just me, but I see this as a poem of hope and resilience. Children are children and they are programmed to play no matter what. They will use natural things, mud, sticks leaves etc often in preference to store bought toys.
So, in spite of the bad weather, in spite of hunger and poverty, in spite of danger and pain, they play.
I also see dandelion seeds as wishes. What would these children wish for? For peace and safety? For food and shelter? For loving arms to hold them if they are orphans? This is the poignant part of the write, for me.
Brilliant work
In my heart I dedicate it to children everywhere, whether in war torn lands or as refugees in foreign countries or living in the slums of big cities. For children everywhere.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Hello Gypsy
Typo in the second line, should be "destitute"
Maybe it's just me, but I see this as a poem of hope and resilience. Children are children and they are programmed to play no matter what. They will use natural things, mud, sticks leaves etc often in preference to store bought toys.
So, in spite of the bad weather, in spite of hunger and poverty, in spite of danger and pain, they play.
I also see dandelion seeds as wishes. What would these children wish for? For peace and safety? For food and shelter? For loving arms to hold them if they are orphans? This is the poignant part of the write, for me.
Brilliant work
In my heart I dedicate it to children everywhere, whether in war torn lands or as refugees in foreign countries or living in the slums of big cities. For children everywhere.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Yes, to all your questions. Thank you for the exceptional six stars review and insightful feedback... shows that you took your time to be so throughly and deeply. I corrected the spelling error and added the dedication to all children.
Hugs
Marival
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Oh I love your name. My real name is Cheryl.
Comment from RJ Heritage
In my mind I can see the refugee children as the seeds that are being brown about by the wind of uncaring and cold people, people without compassion.
Thanks for posting.
RJ
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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In my mind I can see the refugee children as the seeds that are being brown about by the wind of uncaring and cold people, people without compassion.
Thanks for posting.
RJ
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
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You too.
Comment from lyenochka
That's sad. Thanks for reminding us to pray for the children in Ukraine and Gaza and in other places like Syria and Sudan. So many young lives are suffering.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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That's sad. Thanks for reminding us to pray for the children in Ukraine and Gaza and in other places like Syria and Sudan. So many young lives are suffering.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister. Poor little angels.
Love
Marival
Comment from royowen
You know Gypsy wherever and whatever kids are doing, whether poor. Rich, or in between, they are still the beauty of God, well done, what a wonderful they truly areblessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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You know Gypsy wherever and whatever kids are doing, whether poor. Rich, or in between, they are still the beauty of God, well done, what a wonderful they truly areblessings Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy
Gypsy
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Welcome
Comment from shelley kaye
i kept wanting to pause after the first line
and read lines 2 & 3 together
but that could be just me lol
a great meaningful haiku
thought-provoking with smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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i kept wanting to pause after the first line
and read lines 2 & 3 together
but that could be just me lol
a great meaningful haiku
thought-provoking with smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you for the edit
Thank you very much, Shelley.
Gypsy