Right in the Eye
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Comment from Jim Wile
Well, it's obvious something isn't on the up and up. Now, we're not quite sure who's on whose side, and you've set up for an exciting climax to the story. Looking forward to finding out what happens to this intrepid foursome. Nice job of building the suspense.
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Well, it's obvious something isn't on the up and up. Now, we're not quite sure who's on whose side, and you've set up for an exciting climax to the story. Looking forward to finding out what happens to this intrepid foursome. Nice job of building the suspense.
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Albion and the sheriff and the two men out back almost seem as if they are working together, but they all seem a little strange, especially when the two men are supposed to be state and claim they are county.
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Albion and the sheriff and the two men out back almost seem as if they are working together, but they all seem a little strange, especially when the two men are supposed to be state and claim they are county.
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 18-May-2024
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Hmmm indeed.
Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Man, you do a lot of writing, which doesn't allow me to reward much of it properly, since they only give us so many stars. But that doesn't mean that I enjoy your stories any less. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Man, you do a lot of writing, which doesn't allow me to reward much of it properly, since they only give us so many stars. But that doesn't mean that I enjoy your stories any less. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Poor Ben and Sylvia have it coming from all angles, it seems. But Ben will figure it out, with the help of God.
Benji to the rescue! He deserves more than pets; give that pooch some treats!
How many hours a day do you spend writing? I'm lucky to finish one short story in a month, but then I only write 2 hours a day maybe 5 days a week.
Have a great weekend.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Poor Ben and Sylvia have it coming from all angles, it seems. But Ben will figure it out, with the help of God.
Benji to the rescue! He deserves more than pets; give that pooch some treats!
How many hours a day do you spend writing? I'm lucky to finish one short story in a month, but then I only write 2 hours a day maybe 5 days a week.
Have a great weekend.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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smiley face here (hours a day writing)
Thank you for the very kind review.
Right in the Eye was done before I began posting.
I probably average way under an hour a day actually writing. Way more reviewing-for-dollars. (another smiley face here)
Comment from Wendy G
I don't think the two guys out the back are legit. Dogs are good judges of character, and Benji growled at them. The sherifshould have double-checked their credentials. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I don't think the two guys out the back are legit. Dogs are good judges of character, and Benji growled at them. The sherifshould have double-checked their credentials. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thank you.
But if all 'i's were dotted and all 't's were crossed, I fear most novels and movies would fail very early on.
I didn't want to totally surprise readers with an ending that they couldn't have possibly deduced.
Comment from lyenochka
I don't have a good feeling about those two unknown "state boys." If the sheriff doesn't know them, he should have checked them out and called the higher ups to verify.
I like how the older couples were able to get the "fishermen" with their two trombones to get packing.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I don't have a good feeling about those two unknown "state boys." If the sheriff doesn't know them, he should have checked them out and called the higher ups to verify.
I like how the older couples were able to get the "fishermen" with their two trombones to get packing.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you.
Yes. I read and watch detective dramas and if they would only do as I say... there would be neither book nor movie! (smiley face here)
Thanks again.
Comment from jim vecchio
I don't know how you manage it, but your chapter get betterer and betterer! Must be your honoring of God within your story. Now you have me wondering why they avoided mentioning Antlers. I hive suspicions, but I'll let you tell your own story.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I don't know how you manage it, but your chapter get betterer and betterer! Must be your honoring of God within your story. Now you have me wondering why they avoided mentioning Antlers. I hive suspicions, but I'll let you tell your own story.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thankee, thankee, thankee! as Gomer would say with a great big smiley face.
I truly appreciate a good review.
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You earned it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing does a great job of building tension and suspense as Ben and his companions recover from the attempted attack by the gangsters. The use of dialogue and action sequences is terrific. It moves the story forward and really kept me interested. One strength of the writing is the portrayal of Ben's character. I love his on faith and his ethical approach to handling threats. The interaction between Ben and Sylvia adds to their relationship. Great job!
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Your writing does a great job of building tension and suspense as Ben and his companions recover from the attempted attack by the gangsters. The use of dialogue and action sequences is terrific. It moves the story forward and really kept me interested. One strength of the writing is the portrayal of Ben's character. I love his on faith and his ethical approach to handling threats. The interaction between Ben and Sylvia adds to their relationship. Great job!
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you ever so much for the great support!
