-Nature's Awareness-
Spiritual2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was beautiful. Your writing captures the beauty of nature's with such poetic elegance. I found myself reflecting on the words. The imagery you use paints a clear picture of love and harmony. There is a sense of tranquility and spiritual connection. I like the analogy of love as a sharp image complemented by its own intensity. Wow! Great job, this was very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
  |
I thought this was beautiful. Your writing captures the beauty of nature's with such poetic elegance. I found myself reflecting on the words. The imagery you use paints a clear picture of love and harmony. There is a sense of tranquility and spiritual connection. I like the analogy of love as a sharp image complemented by its own intensity. Wow! Great job, this was very enjoyable.
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
-
Thank you for the great review, i have changed it and would be honored if you re-read.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Gordon. This would've been a good entry into the faith contest. I like your poem and in some places, it read like prose. It is definitely about Faith with a capital F.
I want to ask a few questions
Here, did you mean harmony. I suppose harmonies implies more than one
" weight allows the inward man to rest in harmonies "
Here. Should be possessive as in salvation's nest
" His love is immutable and leads us unto salvations nest"
Here
Should it be hallowed rather than hollowed?
" each in need of rare and hollowed reassurances that grace will surely follow suit."
Thank you for sharing
I think I already did this review. I was rereading per your request. In the reread I found this
â??
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
|
Hi, Gordon. This would've been a good entry into the faith contest. I like your poem and in some places, it read like prose. It is definitely about Faith with a capital F.
I want to ask a few questions
Here, did you mean harmony. I suppose harmonies implies more than one
" weight allows the inward man to rest in harmonies "
Here. Should be possessive as in salvation's nest
" His love is immutable and leads us unto salvations nest"
Here
Should it be hallowed rather than hollowed?
" each in need of rare and hollowed reassurances that grace will surely follow suit."
Thank you for sharing
I think I already did this review. I was rereading per your request. In the reread I found this
â??
Comment Written 18-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
-
I must thank you for the great review, i will work on this and update it shortly. Thanks for being honest and pointing out my errors.
-
I was hoping you would re-read this poem. Thanks for the advice.
-
I did reread and found this
? His divine will reveals His grace is immutable and leads us unto salvation's nest.?
I think there needs to be a period in here somewhere. Is ?will? His Will
Maybe a comma will do as in
?
-
I did reread. Here
? His divine will reveals His grace is immutable and leads us unto salvation's nest.?
Change to
His divine Will
reveals His grace, is immutable and leads us unto salvation's nest.
-
Thank you, once again my friend.