The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hmmm, that's an interesting turn. So, Victoria is so intent on getting treasure that can achieve nothing for her, that she willing to destroy William. I didn't see that coming!
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Hmmm, that's an interesting turn. So, Victoria is so intent on getting treasure that can achieve nothing for her, that she willing to destroy William. I didn't see that coming!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Victoria isn't thinking straight at all. She has been so accustomed to being the aristocrat that she's lost tracked of the fact that she'll be in hell and it certainly won't do her any good. Hopefully, she wises up before it's too lat.
Smiles, Carol
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Indeed!!
Comment from royowen
I seemed to have read this out of sequence Carol, but this episode seems to explain that eternal hold that Victoria has over William, a nice man and now, Ghost, insure you have this story in hand, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I seemed to have read this out of sequence Carol, but this episode seems to explain that eternal hold that Victoria has over William, a nice man and now, Ghost, insure you have this story in hand, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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I think Victoria was always the driving force behind William and when he decided to repent and give back, she didn't like it. Maybe that's why the treasure was hidden so securely. Makes one wonder if she might have been involved in the original murder. LOL Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
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Thank you Carol
Comment from lyenochka
You sure know how to create villains and villainesses. But I can't understand how these spirits have so much flesh-like abilities - like drinking champagne and putting on perfume and touching and even being able to be hit by a candlestick holder which should go right through a spirit.
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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You sure know how to create villains and villainesses. But I can't understand how these spirits have so much flesh-like abilities - like drinking champagne and putting on perfume and touching and even being able to be hit by a candlestick holder which should go right through a spirit.
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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When I researched...because i know nothing about ghosts...it said that if the ghosts could materialize to mortals, then they also could do things like mortals do. They might not respond the exact way as mortals but similar. It's a fictional story so I'm just doing my best...
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Victoria is more vicious and selfish than I had ever imagined. She will now have the key. My question is...what is the treasure? Is it money or gold? And how will a ghost use the treasure. If this has all been explained, I think I somehow missed it. Regardless, it looks like the treasure has a strong chance of belonging to Victoria, unless Lorrie and the other ghosts find out she has the key.
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Victoria is more vicious and selfish than I had ever imagined. She will now have the key. My question is...what is the treasure? Is it money or gold? And how will a ghost use the treasure. If this has all been explained, I think I somehow missed it. Regardless, it looks like the treasure has a strong chance of belonging to Victoria, unless Lorrie and the other ghosts find out she has the key.
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Me too! I didn't set out to make her that way, but it seems thats how her character unfolded. She saw a chance to be an aristocrat again and lost track of her original goal. I'm not sure she can be saved. The treasure is all the "stolen loot" that the Judge and his crew stole from every nook and crannie they found. It's anything worth value. But when he had a change of heart...he hid it in the mansion, but a bullet to the head made him forget where. And the evil ghosts...they are just evil and can't comprehend that if they have the treasure they will be damned to hell and the treasure won't do them any good anyhow. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Wow, that was an amazing chapter showing the true nature of Victoria and how she'd really been like. The murder scene was so very well described. I loved how you said William turning into an icy mist. They both were ghosts, after all. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Wow, that was an amazing chapter showing the true nature of Victoria and how she'd really been like. The murder scene was so very well described. I loved how you said William turning into an icy mist. They both were ghosts, after all. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Yes, they are...and we have no idea if that was the end of William or whether he has vaporized to appear somewhere else.... far away from Victoria I hope. Thanks again as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
The evil Victoria even gets a chance at redemption. You create such complex characters. I am visualizing you in your writing cave, unhindered by distractions. I need a place to write. Sitting at the kitchen table just isn't conducive to creativity. Esther
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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The evil Victoria even gets a chance at redemption. You create such complex characters. I am visualizing you in your writing cave, unhindered by distractions. I need a place to write. Sitting at the kitchen table just isn't conducive to creativity. Esther
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I have a desk in my family room which looks out over the river and its very quiet most of the times. I usually write my stories in the early morning hours and then do reading and reviews throughout the day...off and on. As for Victoria...she's about to make a decision that will end any chances of being with William in the hereafter... maybe Sebastian can help her.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Wow... Quite the morality tale playing out, and Victoria is willing to kill to make her point...
(William didn't stand a "ghost" of a chance)
Sometimes I can't help myself..
"A sense of foreboding for the future nagged at him."
(I think you could omit "for the future" here)
Victoria is shallower than a puddle!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Wow... Quite the morality tale playing out, and Victoria is willing to kill to make her point...
(William didn't stand a "ghost" of a chance)
Sometimes I can't help myself..
"A sense of foreboding for the future nagged at him."
(I think you could omit "for the future" here)
Victoria is shallower than a puddle!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Yes, Victoria has lived in the mansion for so long that now when she sees the possibility of reliving as a aristocrat, she's lost site of the fact that she will end in damnation.
Smiles, Carol
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Hmmm. Damnation has a way of catching up to you!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Victoria seems to try every one of her tricks to influence William, but in the end, she apparently sent him into oblivion. Her desire for the treasure is consuming her and may ruin everything for all the ghosts.
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Victoria seems to try every one of her tricks to influence William, but in the end, she apparently sent him into oblivion. Her desire for the treasure is consuming her and may ruin everything for all the ghosts.
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Yes, Victoria is remembering and wanting the aristocrat life she once knew and she mistakenly believes finding the treasure will give her this. I think she will realize her error, but it might be too late.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Victoria is so trapped in her own selfishness and greed that seems to have only intensified with death. It is interesting that your ghosts drink wine, change clothes, and attack one another physically. I imagine this is a byproduct of materializing, maybe? Excellent, dramatic writing!
Julie
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Victoria is so trapped in her own selfishness and greed that seems to have only intensified with death. It is interesting that your ghosts drink wine, change clothes, and attack one another physically. I imagine this is a byproduct of materializing, maybe? Excellent, dramatic writing!
Julie
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Exctly...I wasn't sure if this was possible but I read that if ghosts can materialize and present themselves to mortals, they also adapt to that in other parts of their lives. I wasn't sure about hitting William on the head, but according to some, I can write it that way. So I did! Oh well, it's fiction anyhow. LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You're in charge lady. You can write it how you want! :-)
But I think it follows just fine how you have.
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I don't really know what I am doing...just shooting in the dark, I suppose, hoping it is entertaining. Since I've never met a ghost...I draw my own pictures. LOL
Comment from Ric Myworld
This might be my favorite chapter yet. Although, I've liked them all. But I only wish I had a six to reward it properly. I like reading numerous chapters every week, but I don't like that there isn't enough stars to go around. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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This might be my favorite chapter yet. Although, I've liked them all. But I only wish I had a six to reward it properly. I like reading numerous chapters every week, but I don't like that there isn't enough stars to go around. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Not to worry, my friend. Though I certainly appreciate the sixth sat, I enjoy hearing from you and the others that they are loving the story. When I get on a roll...which doesn't always happen with this story...I need to write and keep writing till I get it down. I'm two thirds through the next chapter so maybe....I might get it written today. Then I need to read, read, read, because I've spent the money I won in the contests and now I must earn some more. Thanks so much for always enjoying my efforts and of course for encouraging me with those virtual sixes.
Smiles always, Carol