The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh noooo, don't trust her, Madeline. Anytime someone says keep a relationship a secret, blurt it out!
I'm telling you, it's hard to know who to trust! Well, it is a mansion full of ghosts, after all.
On we go,
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Oh noooo, don't trust her, Madeline. Anytime someone says keep a relationship a secret, blurt it out!
I'm telling you, it's hard to know who to trust! Well, it is a mansion full of ghosts, after all.
On we go,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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A mansion full of ghosts and who knows who else....good, bad, evil and Godly. What a hodge podge I've created. LOL Glad you are enjoying each character.
Smiles, Carol
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Indeed, you have. A very different theme, too. Unique and well written.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Madeline is so upset, those feelings of regret, wrongful decisions, but mixing unsubstantiated accusations and threats, attract the attention and sympathetic feelings of someone who has likewise experienced the same, beautifully written Carol, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Madeline is so upset, those feelings of regret, wrongful decisions, but mixing unsubstantiated accusations and threats, attract the attention and sympathetic feelings of someone who has likewise experienced the same, beautifully written Carol, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I think Esther and Madeline will find a lot in common and both might be able to stay on the right track with support...well, maybe! Thanks so much for the review.
Smiles, Carol
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Good job
Comment from Ulla
Ah, this is interesting, But Esther has a motive of her own. Ghost or no ghost. I'm looking forward to seeing how she can help, Madeline.
It's such a great story, Carol. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Ah, this is interesting, But Esther has a motive of her own. Ghost or no ghost. I'm looking forward to seeing how she can help, Madeline.
It's such a great story, Carol. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Esther has a troubled past and a lost love that she's never recovered from, but hopefully finding a friend in Madeline and a few other things that might unfold will lead her to a better place.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Yep, I like your new character. As you knew I would. My middle name is Eugenia which is even more quaint. Madeline needed a friend. Can't wait to see how this develops. Esther
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Yep, I like your new character. As you knew I would. My middle name is Eugenia which is even more quaint. Madeline needed a friend. Can't wait to see how this develops. Esther
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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I thought you might like Esther. She could lean either way because of her past, but I think Madeline and a few other things that will unfold will help her find the better side of the hereafter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Every ghost in the mansion has a motive. Madeline cannot trust anyone, and has no friends. It seems Lorrie is the only one who cares about what happens to Madeline. Now, there is Esther, with a motive. What is it, and how will she accomplish her goals? You have continued to add mystery and suspense with every chapter. You have out done yourself with this ghost story. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Every ghost in the mansion has a motive. Madeline cannot trust anyone, and has no friends. It seems Lorrie is the only one who cares about what happens to Madeline. Now, there is Esther, with a motive. What is it, and how will she accomplish her goals? You have continued to add mystery and suspense with every chapter. You have out done yourself with this ghost story. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Oh, Lorraine you make me smile and feel so good about writing this story. I remember wanting to stop and at times I wonder if I am doing it justice. Thanks so much for following and adding all your encouragement.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Just when thought the roster was complete, here comes Esther! (You wily writer you!)
I so hope Esther is a spirit of redemption...
Madeline seems to want to set things right.
You captured Esther's torn emotions well.
One suggestion: "She turned and ran through the back door..."
Maybe OUT the back door?
(I'm picturing splintered wood or a torn screen!)
Very smooth, Lorrie spotting the handkerchief!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Just when thought the roster was complete, here comes Esther! (You wily writer you!)
I so hope Esther is a spirit of redemption...
Madeline seems to want to set things right.
You captured Esther's torn emotions well.
One suggestion: "She turned and ran through the back door..."
Maybe OUT the back door?
(I'm picturing splintered wood or a torn screen!)
Very smooth, Lorrie spotting the handkerchief!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 15-May-2024
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Madeline and Esther have a lot in common but they also have great fears and trust issues. I'm hoping that they will find enough common ground to bond together and stay on the good side of the fence.
Smiles, Carol
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I'll keep that in mind!
:)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Madeline claims to be telling the truth now, but her new friend Esther seems to have the same desires as Madeline. Both are a little too interested in the treasure.
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Madeline claims to be telling the truth now, but her new friend Esther seems to have the same desires as Madeline. Both are a little too interested in the treasure.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Both are feeling their way with a new friendship and with old ways. I'm not sure how this will unfold but I know it will get interesting. Thanks so much, Carol
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This story gets better with each new chapter. You have found your niche in the writing world. I love a good ghost story, and this is one of the best. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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This story gets better with each new chapter. You have found your niche in the writing world. I love a good ghost story, and this is one of the best. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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thank you, April. You flatter me so much and I am lapping it up. Writing a ghost story was at the bottom of my list but it appears as if this one is a hit. I so appreciate your support and encouragement.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Madline lied to Lorrie. I can't wait to hear Ester's story. I bet it's full of information. Good job writing this. I will go read the next post.
Sobbing, Madeline struggled to talk. "I admit I (comma after 'talk')
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Madline lied to Lorrie. I can't wait to hear Ester's story. I bet it's full of information. Good job writing this. I will go read the next post.
Sobbing, Madeline struggled to talk. "I admit I (comma after 'talk')
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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What? Only one...there must be a mistake. LOL Actually, I didn't think you would have time to read these chapters since you were leaving on vacation. I am thrilled to hear from you.
As always, smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Now we have yet another character. There is lot to sort out. I'm not sure why everyone redemption revolves around the key but I"m sure I'll find out in time. I guess is the key to the treasure but why Ghosts hoping to make it out of pergaratory or wherever they are would need the literal treasuire. Whay good can it do a ghost. The veil between the actual and supernatural seems thin. I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Now we have yet another character. There is lot to sort out. I'm not sure why everyone redemption revolves around the key but I"m sure I'll find out in time. I guess is the key to the treasure but why Ghosts hoping to make it out of pergaratory or wherever they are would need the literal treasuire. Whay good can it do a ghost. The veil between the actual and supernatural seems thin. I look forward to more.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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The foursome - Noah, the Judge, Benny and Ryan - joined together believing that there was enough wealth to be given back that would open the doors to redemption. Wuth the help of Sandra and James they thought they could continue the good will and find help for the others. On the other hand, those who just want the treasure for themselves, don't believe in God or damnation and think it will buy them a better life somewhere. It's alabout faith and what you believe.
Smiles, Carol