I Could Go On
A free form verse on competition5 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
Bryce,
Congrats on winning the Competition Contest. Your poem coves every aspect of competition with well written stanzas highlighting the often false beliefs we carry within us about the value of competing.
I liked the section
Competition is not finding out who is better and who is worse
Good and bad
Winner and loser
Worthy or not
Competition occurs between two people who want to become better
There does not have to be anything sad about loss
Loss is an arrow pointing forward
Not a stop sign with bad news
They want to get better and competiton makes them better
It is a positive thing
All the best,
Eugene
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Bryce,
Congrats on winning the Competition Contest. Your poem coves every aspect of competition with well written stanzas highlighting the often false beliefs we carry within us about the value of competing.
I liked the section
Competition is not finding out who is better and who is worse
Good and bad
Winner and loser
Worthy or not
Competition occurs between two people who want to become better
There does not have to be anything sad about loss
Loss is an arrow pointing forward
Not a stop sign with bad news
They want to get better and competiton makes them better
It is a positive thing
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 18-May-2024
Comment from boxergirl
Congratulations on winning this competition! I enjoyed your free verse, especially the stacking on adjectives/adverbs in between each block of phrases. I also liked the change in perspective from identifying negative aspects to the positive and wrapping it up with it being worth the risk by entering this contest.
Karen
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Congratulations on winning this competition! I enjoyed your free verse, especially the stacking on adjectives/adverbs in between each block of phrases. I also liked the change in perspective from identifying negative aspects to the positive and wrapping it up with it being worth the risk by entering this contest.
Karen
Comment Written 18-May-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi,
This free verse uses line breaks well to describe both views of competition.
I agree that competition is good if you look at it the way you do in the second half of the poem. It provides growth and hope.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
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Hi,
This free verse uses line breaks well to describe both views of competition.
I agree that competition is good if you look at it the way you do in the second half of the poem. It provides growth and hope.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 16-May-2024
Comment from Brandi Radaker
I absolutely loved this! To say it was perfect is an understatement. I loved the format and the the thought process. And I love the personal growth and lesson at the end. Amazing job and best wishes!
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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I absolutely loved this! To say it was perfect is an understatement. I loved the format and the the thought process. And I love the personal growth and lesson at the end. Amazing job and best wishes!
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you very much. I really appreciate your feedback and it means a lot to me that what I had to say, resonated with someone. Much love
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a really interesting format for your poetry. The constant repetition gets each point across along with various nuances that come with the different rephrasings.
I might of been wrong
(I might have been wrong)
A very enjoyable entry for the prompt!
Julie
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This is a really interesting format for your poetry. The constant repetition gets each point across along with various nuances that come with the different rephrasings.
I might of been wrong
(I might have been wrong)
A very enjoyable entry for the prompt!
Julie
Comment Written 12-May-2024