Sunita's Story
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Family Drama"An unmarried Village girl suffering from vitiligo
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Comment from Carol Clark2
I like that you have given the reactions of both sets of parents about the possible marriage between Sunita and Dr. Rahul. It sounds like there will be an interesting decision for Sunita to make. Good chapter! Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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I like that you have given the reactions of both sets of parents about the possible marriage between Sunita and Dr. Rahul. It sounds like there will be an interesting decision for Sunita to make. Good chapter! Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2024
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Thanks Carol. Wait for the next chapter when the families meet, keeping in mind that Rahul's family (the rich landlords of the village) do not want the marriage and Sunita's family (the father being a simple trader) wants to get Sunita married, especially to such an elite family.
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That sounds like an interesting mix of families and situations. I'll watch for the next chapter. Carol
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Thanks, Carol. The next Chapter is titled, "The Proposal".
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I like how you chapter is so dialogue driven. It works so well in sharing the complex family dynamics. Through the conversations between Rahul and his mother, as well as Sunita and her parents, I really gained insight into who they are. Most importantly, the dialogue feels authentic. I thought you developed each character so well. Mrs. Vikram's concern for her son's future and reluctance to accept Sunita due to what society expects comes across so well. And it contrasts with Sunita's parents' initial disbelief and eventual excitement over the unexpected marriage proposal. Well done! This was so interesting and enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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I like how you chapter is so dialogue driven. It works so well in sharing the complex family dynamics. Through the conversations between Rahul and his mother, as well as Sunita and her parents, I really gained insight into who they are. Most importantly, the dialogue feels authentic. I thought you developed each character so well. Mrs. Vikram's concern for her son's future and reluctance to accept Sunita due to what society expects comes across so well. And it contrasts with Sunita's parents' initial disbelief and eventual excitement over the unexpected marriage proposal. Well done! This was so interesting and enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Thank you Michael. I believe you will find the next chapter further captures the complex nuances when the Vikrams come over to the Agarwal home with the proposal. I know these chapters are long and daunting for the FanStory community of reviewer but just the same... Thank you, once again for your read.
Comment from royowen
These sound like Indian names. But steeped in tradition, Rahul must practice in America but is home to visit, hence the age difference between Rahul and his mother's desires of marriage, good mating prospects. I can understand why Rahul finds Sunita attractive, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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These sound like Indian names. But steeped in tradition, Rahul must practice in America but is home to visit, hence the age difference between Rahul and his mother's desires of marriage, good mating prospects. I can understand why Rahul finds Sunita attractive, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate your read and your kind comments. Yes, these are Indian names but I have deliberately never mentioned the country by it's name because such occurrences can happen in other parts of East Asia (Sri Lanka, for example). Vitiligo, in today's world can easily be hidden with makeup, but the prejudices are deep in villages that surpasses the skin-deep theory. Thank you, once again.
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Of course, like those of Chinese ancestry. Indians are well travelled and emigrate, bless you
Comment from Mia Twysted
It would help the reader if you could make the font larger on the screen. The eye tends to get lost and then the reader is forced to refind find their place and it breaks the hold the story has on you.
The conversations between mother and son are very well done. This is an interesting story.
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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It would help the reader if you could make the font larger on the screen. The eye tends to get lost and then the reader is forced to refind find their place and it breaks the hold the story has on you.
The conversations between mother and son are very well done. This is an interesting story.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Thank you Mia. I will definitely try a larger font.