Sometimes We Fall
Don't give up if you're happy or sad2 total reviews
Comment from gansach
This poem is good--your thoughts and advice have great meaning. Just a couple notes if you don't mind--I would use a larger size font print to make it easier to read and lighten the background so the font stands out more. While not necessary, including artwork always enhances a poem and makes an inviting presentation. Your first line, was should be we. I liked your poem, the rhythm is a bit inconsistent in places, but the message is good. Keep writing and sharing! Best wishes!
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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This poem is good--your thoughts and advice have great meaning. Just a couple notes if you don't mind--I would use a larger size font print to make it easier to read and lighten the background so the font stands out more. While not necessary, including artwork always enhances a poem and makes an inviting presentation. Your first line, was should be we. I liked your poem, the rhythm is a bit inconsistent in places, but the message is good. Keep writing and sharing! Best wishes!
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thanks for the advice. Have great week!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I enjoyed your poem. For me it shows the resilience of the human spirit in the face of adversity. The repetition of "sometimes" at the beginning of each stanza works well. It seems to emphasize the unpredictable nature of life's challenges and emotions. And I agree with your author notes that putting it forward as questions make you think about each line. Very creative!
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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I enjoyed your poem. For me it shows the resilience of the human spirit in the face of adversity. The repetition of "sometimes" at the beginning of each stanza works well. It seems to emphasize the unpredictable nature of life's challenges and emotions. And I agree with your author notes that putting it forward as questions make you think about each line. Very creative!
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you!
