Your Life
1-9-1 Poem4 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
These beads are a good metaphor for life. It reminds me of wearing charm bracelets.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Hi
These beads are a good metaphor for life. It reminds me of wearing charm bracelets.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 12-May-2024
reply by the author on 12-May-2024
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Thank you for your review and for the feedback.
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No problem, Andrea.
Joan
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
OooOOooo... Clever! Quite a unique way of looking at this thing called life. Your syllable counts are all in order and the visual images you create are delightful.
If I were to offer anything negative, it might be that 'craft' seems a little bit of a stretch. (Of course, that's me.) But it seems a little off-topic. Maybe you're saying we craft our own lives? I get that - I do.
Since the title was "Your Life", maybe I expected the piece to return to something closer to that.
Please don't get me wrong - this is just me sharing an extra, extra critical moment, jic. But I'll bet 98.9% of your reviewers will tell you this is a remarkable post, because it is. (Notice no deduction in stars.) Thank you for an insightful piece and much good luck. (Man, I hope this just makes SENSE!) *smile*
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Dear Mystery Writer,
OooOOooo... Clever! Quite a unique way of looking at this thing called life. Your syllable counts are all in order and the visual images you create are delightful.
If I were to offer anything negative, it might be that 'craft' seems a little bit of a stretch. (Of course, that's me.) But it seems a little off-topic. Maybe you're saying we craft our own lives? I get that - I do.
Since the title was "Your Life", maybe I expected the piece to return to something closer to that.
Please don't get me wrong - this is just me sharing an extra, extra critical moment, jic. But I'll bet 98.9% of your reviewers will tell you this is a remarkable post, because it is. (Notice no deduction in stars.) Thank you for an insightful piece and much good luck. (Man, I hope this just makes SENSE!) *smile*
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thank you for your review and feedback. I am using craft in the sense of crafting one's life by choosing which experience beads to add to their chain.
Comment from Nicki Nance
I string a lot of beads and have yet to encounter the experience collection. This is a fun 1-9-1 with a message, you chose a perfect metaphor and your second line provided enough imagery to tell the story. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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I string a lot of beads and have yet to encounter the experience collection. This is a fun 1-9-1 with a message, you chose a perfect metaphor and your second line provided enough imagery to tell the story. Well done.
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thank you for your review and feedback.
Comment from mermaids
Your words show how over time, our experience creates so much. Excellent use of the 1-9-1 form to show the road of life and what we can create. You say much in few words.
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Your words show how over time, our experience creates so much. Excellent use of the 1-9-1 form to show the road of life and what we can create. You say much in few words.
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thank you for your review and feedback.