Death to the house of nothingness
Fighting demons sometimes leads us to remarkable conclusions15 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
That's a powerful story of being freed from the bondage of guilt and not receiving the Lord's forgiveness. In the scary beginning, I laughed at "I had moments so dark that darkness feared me." Good use of humor at the right place!
Suggestions:
The pastors voice had taken (pastor's)
on an angelical quality (angelic)
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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That's a powerful story of being freed from the bondage of guilt and not receiving the Lord's forgiveness. In the scary beginning, I laughed at "I had moments so dark that darkness feared me." Good use of humor at the right place!
Suggestions:
The pastors voice had taken (pastor's)
on an angelical quality (angelic)
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Yes, those are valid. Thank you very much. Thank you for reviewing. I used to review more, but there was no reciprocation. Now, I pick and choose.
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Thank you for being the reader who got this story recognized I know you have had that happen a thousand times, but for me it's something.
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You're welcome! It was very well written. I did browse your portfolio until I found one with just 14 reviews. If you want, you can always re-promote which I do if a post is shy of a recognition. But do this only for this year's posts because re-promoting old posts will not go to this year's rankings.
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Thanks.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Very interesting. I thought I had already reviewed this. It wouldn't be the first time I lost a review to the either. I am jonesing for a good joke, Do you know one? Have you heard this one? What do you call A clairvoyant dwarf, on the run from the law?..........
A small medium at large! :-)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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Very interesting. I thought I had already reviewed this. It wouldn't be the first time I lost a review to the either. I am jonesing for a good joke, Do you know one? Have you heard this one? What do you call A clairvoyant dwarf, on the run from the law?..........
A small medium at large! :-)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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😂
Comment from A.Z. Schott
Wow, Eean! Your command of language is fantastic! The internal conflict of the main character is so gripping and raw!
The angelic pastor leaves the reader wondering if he was real or just a crazed figment of Eean's feverish imagination.
The desire to burn down the structures that have failed us is something everyone can relate to for sure.
Wonderfully written! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Wow, Eean! Your command of language is fantastic! The internal conflict of the main character is so gripping and raw!
The angelic pastor leaves the reader wondering if he was real or just a crazed figment of Eean's feverish imagination.
The desire to burn down the structures that have failed us is something everyone can relate to for sure.
Wonderfully written! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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I did not expect a good review for this story. My best story is For I Had Known Her. But I thank you very much.
Comment from Claire Tennant
This deserved a higher place than my effort I cried through it; it made sense of a private problem I have at the moment. Nothing dramatic just an annoying supposed friend. Thank you fr your kind words. God bless you
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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This deserved a higher place than my effort I cried through it; it made sense of a private problem I have at the moment. Nothing dramatic just an annoying supposed friend. Thank you fr your kind words. God bless you
Comment Written 07-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2024
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He has blessed me. He blessed me with your kind words.
Comment from pome lover
whew! Glad that was fiction. But to write something like that is a harrowing thought. It definitely was from the depths. Imaginative, though, and creative. deep thoughts, too.
Now, are you going to try something fun, funny, or a mystery?
I looked back over your neat review of my political piece with cute, fun responses, and wanted to reciprocate. Have been gone for a while, and am just catching up with people.
Katharine
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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whew! Glad that was fiction. But to write something like that is a harrowing thought. It definitely was from the depths. Imaginative, though, and creative. deep thoughts, too.
Now, are you going to try something fun, funny, or a mystery?
I looked back over your neat review of my political piece with cute, fun responses, and wanted to reciprocate. Have been gone for a while, and am just catching up with people.
Katharine
Comment Written 06-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2024
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Thank you. This was for a contest From the depths they came. I?ll try to write something funny. Rum Higgins is humorous, but not real comedy. Thanks for the inspiration.
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good luck, and have fun!
Comment from Erika Whittle
Not going to lie that went in a direction I wasn't expecting. I'm also writing something for this contest but had interpreted the starting line as a physical thing. I think you did a really good job portraying it as psychological. I enjoyed your story :)
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Not going to lie that went in a direction I wasn't expecting. I'm also writing something for this contest but had interpreted the starting line as a physical thing. I think you did a really good job portraying it as psychological. I enjoyed your story :)
Comment Written 28-May-2024
reply by the author on 28-May-2024
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Good luck I hope you win!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm actually very relieved to learn that this is entirely fictional. It's a very dark read which you express vividly as though you'd been there yourself. When your protagonist goes to the church with the intention of burning it down, I thought for a moment that this may be because he wanted to take out revenge on the pastor for abuse that had triggered the demons. But your story went beyond even this. What he needed was redemption from feelings of guilt for burning down his home. Once given, he was free to start his life over. This is an excellent and imaginative write for the contest, fulfilling the prompt "from the depths" and a very worthy entry. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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I'm actually very relieved to learn that this is entirely fictional. It's a very dark read which you express vividly as though you'd been there yourself. When your protagonist goes to the church with the intention of burning it down, I thought for a moment that this may be because he wanted to take out revenge on the pastor for abuse that had triggered the demons. But your story went beyond even this. What he needed was redemption from feelings of guilt for burning down his home. Once given, he was free to start his life over. This is an excellent and imaginative write for the contest, fulfilling the prompt "from the depths" and a very worthy entry. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 27-May-2024
reply by the author on 27-May-2024
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This story provides a deep dive into the mind and psyche of a protagonist tormented by demonic thoughts. The story is compelling, fictitious, and yet realistic. Most people have, at some point, experienced, and rejected evil thoughts. This is a gripping story for the "From the Depths" contest. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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This story provides a deep dive into the mind and psyche of a protagonist tormented by demonic thoughts. The story is compelling, fictitious, and yet realistic. Most people have, at some point, experienced, and rejected evil thoughts. This is a gripping story for the "From the Depths" contest. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Ingratiated
Comment from BethShelby
I think you are an excellent writer. I enjoyed your story. Since I've not seen your work before, I assume you joined FanStory last month. I see you don't follow anyone or have any fans as yet. I hope you will enjoy being on this site. I wish you share more about yourself. We are a community of writers shw like to get to know eash other.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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I think you are an excellent writer. I enjoyed your story. Since I've not seen your work before, I assume you joined FanStory last month. I see you don't follow anyone or have any fans as yet. I hope you will enjoy being on this site. I wish you share more about yourself. We are a community of writers shw like to get to know eash other.
Comment Written 26-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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It?s for a contest I can?t share lol
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I meant in your profile. Like where you are from and maybe what like to do or have done.
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No worries, I'm just a little shy. Sorry.
Comment from Thesis
You packed a lot in this story. It had lots of emotion, doubt, and feelings of despair. There was a lot of darkness identified through thoughts and feelings, the need to forgive and move on. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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You packed a lot in this story. It had lots of emotion, doubt, and feelings of despair. There was a lot of darkness identified through thoughts and feelings, the need to forgive and move on. Well done.
Comment Written 24-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you.
