Train Journey To New Chapters
Sert at the beginning of the evacuation period WW24 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao writer, you now have 8 votes.
Your story interested me much.
My mother was born in The Hague and was 5 when the war broke out. The Germans invaded Holland in May 1940.
The V-2 rockets that were launched on London departed mostly from The Hague.
Both my grandparents and mother survived the war.
Some 40,000 civilians died of hunger during the last winter of the war 1944-45
The Germans stopped food from coming in the cities and famine struck and people ate grass and tulip bulbs to survive.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Ciao writer, you now have 8 votes.
Your story interested me much.
My mother was born in The Hague and was 5 when the war broke out. The Germans invaded Holland in May 1940.
The V-2 rockets that were launched on London departed mostly from The Hague.
Both my grandparents and mother survived the war.
Some 40,000 civilians died of hunger during the last winter of the war 1944-45
The Germans stopped food from coming in the cities and famine struck and people ate grass and tulip bulbs to survive.
Comment Written 08-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Oh my gosh! The war was not pleasant for anyone. Of course, the UK was relatively lucky, but it was evident that foster parents were chosen in a hurry, and not all of them were suitable guardians. Thank you for your review and the information you gave me.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story with what seemed to be great accuracy. I imagine the adults were nervous and the children were frightened, but some undoubtedly overcame their fears to become friends.
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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This is a good story with what seemed to be great accuracy. I imagine the adults were nervous and the children were frightened, but some undoubtedly overcame their fears to become friends.
Comment Written 07-May-2024
reply by the author on 08-May-2024
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Thank you, Carol. I believe there will be more to come someday
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a very interesting story. Really my only knowledge of this aspect of the War is from the Chronicles of Narnia as the Pevensie children were shipped out of London.
You took a unique perspective from that of a child. All around an interesting and educational story!
Julie
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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This is a very interesting story. Really my only knowledge of this aspect of the War is from the Chronicles of Narnia as the Pevensie children were shipped out of London.
You took a unique perspective from that of a child. All around an interesting and educational story!
Julie
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Yes, my mother and her brother were evacuated at this time. There were some horrific stories, which between you and I were frightening. Fortunately she lived overseas voluntarily
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Sert at the beginning of the evacuation period WW2 - opening word should be Set? It's very important to make sure titles and description lines are correct as these are the first thing that folk see.
evacuated to safer places in country Scotland, - this reads awkwardly. Maybe try something like 'in the Scottish countryside'.
It was imperative to get folk away from the big cities under threat of Hitler's power. - this sentence feels out of context where it's placed. it's also repetitive from information given in the opening paragraph.
I think this could do with a bit more work as it doesn't feel like a fully-fledged story in its own right yet, but a snapshot of something bigger. there's no real ending which is a requisite of the contest.
There's an odd sort of disconnect feeling to the write as well. Almost a distance from the characters.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Hi there,
Sert at the beginning of the evacuation period WW2 - opening word should be Set? It's very important to make sure titles and description lines are correct as these are the first thing that folk see.
evacuated to safer places in country Scotland, - this reads awkwardly. Maybe try something like 'in the Scottish countryside'.
It was imperative to get folk away from the big cities under threat of Hitler's power. - this sentence feels out of context where it's placed. it's also repetitive from information given in the opening paragraph.
I think this could do with a bit more work as it doesn't feel like a fully-fledged story in its own right yet, but a snapshot of something bigger. there's no real ending which is a requisite of the contest.
There's an odd sort of disconnect feeling to the write as well. Almost a distance from the characters.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 06-May-2024
reply by the author on 06-May-2024
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Well actually the rest of the story is currently being reviewed because it is based on my mothers experiences at this period and in Perthshire. If this wee tale, does not make it, the rest will and that is a secret between you and me.
