Right in the Eye
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Comment from Jim Wile
This was quite a surprising turn of events. Just when plans are made to move on, we find out Sylvia's pimp is attempting to get her back, if I'm reading this correctly. But she's a force to be reckoned with, and she chases them off. What next for this dynamic duo?
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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This was quite a surprising turn of events. Just when plans are made to move on, we find out Sylvia's pimp is attempting to get her back, if I'm reading this correctly. But she's a force to be reckoned with, and she chases them off. What next for this dynamic duo?
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
You have a special way of bringing back old memories, that don't really have anything to do with your story, other than it's about life. I was six the first time I shot a shotgun. A double barrel Ithaca, and they told me to pull both barrels at the same time. An experience I've never forgotten. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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You have a special way of bringing back old memories, that don't really have anything to do with your story, other than it's about life. I was six the first time I shot a shotgun. A double barrel Ithaca, and they told me to pull both barrels at the same time. An experience I've never forgotten. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-May-2024
reply by the author on 03-May-2024
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Musta been an older brother told you to pull both triggers? Or an uncle?
Thank for the fun review.
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It was my dad and grandfather. They also told me to hold it real loose when I pulled the triggers. When I got older, they said that's what made me so tough. But I think it better symbolized stupid.
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lucky your shoulder wasn't dislocated.
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The shoulder was black and blue, I got knocked on my butt, and about bit my tongue into. They didn't think it was so funny after the fact, and I darn sure didn't at the time. But we laughed about for many years. :-)
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
We know Sylvia's husband is dead, so who is at the door? "She was mine" "I rented her out" "People came from Durango, Pueblo, all over to get that". And she's worth a million dollars? I must have missed something here, and you've built an entire chapter around it, so it must be important.
Perhaps it becomes more clear to me in the next chapter.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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We know Sylvia's husband is dead, so who is at the door? "She was mine" "I rented her out" "People came from Durango, Pueblo, all over to get that". And she's worth a million dollars? I must have missed something here, and you've built an entire chapter around it, so it must be important.
Perhaps it becomes more clear to me in the next chapter.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you for your very kind review.
In the last chapter Ben rescued a girl from a hotel. It will be revealed that she was this man's prostitute.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter as Sylvia gives Ben all the reasons he should let her drive him in her car to where he wants to go next. I must admit I do not understand what the man in the car was talking about. Who is "she" and how does he rent her out and for what? Maybe I missed a chapter, but I am confused.
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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This is an interesting chapter as Sylvia gives Ben all the reasons he should let her drive him in her car to where he wants to go next. I must admit I do not understand what the man in the car was talking about. Who is "she" and how does he rent her out and for what? Maybe I missed a chapter, but I am confused.
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you for your review.
In chapter 17, Ben Paul rescued a girl from a hotel fire. She was the man in the Jeep's prostitute. He claimed to 'own' her.
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You might make that a little clearer. He just seems to pop up out of nowhere and make threats.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my goodness - suddenly from a spiritual western/frontier/historical novel we got a pair of senior Bonnie & Clyde story. Why did the guys want Ben? I didn't understand why these men were after Ben. I guess Ben feels sorry for the dogs as he had to euthanize a couple?
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Oh my goodness - suddenly from a spiritual western/frontier/historical novel we got a pair of senior Bonnie & Clyde story. Why did the guys want Ben? I didn't understand why these men were after Ben. I guess Ben feels sorry for the dogs as he had to euthanize a couple?
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for your very kind review.
The details will unfold.
Ben discovered, and was instrumental in saving the girl. There was only one man in the Jeep. He was the girl's pimp. (Turned out that Ben Paul followed his father's pattern of rescuing women!) The dogs were not shot. Instead, Sylvia shot at the Jeep.
Comment from jim vecchio
Wow! This is getting exciting! And me with only five stars. I was munching on a piece of store-bought apple pie when I read about the peach pie, so it was like 3D! I liked the way you worded that little kiss before bed. Really captured the personality of your character. Better go before my Internet goes again.
It went. I'm retrying!
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Wow! This is getting exciting! And me with only five stars. I was munching on a piece of store-bought apple pie when I read about the peach pie, so it was like 3D! I liked the way you worded that little kiss before bed. Really captured the personality of your character. Better go before my Internet goes again.
It went. I'm retrying!
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Sorry about your internet.
Thank you for your great review!
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I always enjoy your work. I should receive wifi equipment soon and set up better wifi in my room.
Comment from Mark Jackson
This passage is a captivating addition to the narrative, showcasing the resilience and courage of the characters as they navigate the challenges and dangers that arise in their journey. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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This passage is a captivating addition to the narrative, showcasing the resilience and courage of the characters as they navigate the challenges and dangers that arise in their journey. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for your fine review.
Comment from Wendy G
Well both Ben Paul and Sylvia are pretty brave and resourceful but that probably won't be the end of their "visitor". Interesting and nice to see their developing relationship. Good for them.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Well both Ben Paul and Sylvia are pretty brave and resourceful but that probably won't be the end of their "visitor". Interesting and nice to see their developing relationship. Good for them.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you. I always grimace at Hallmark-type books or movies where the main actors/characters are invariably beautiful and available. By using aged people, I hoped I wouldn't be seen as contrived.
Comment from royowen
What an exciting episode Wayne, Ben knows how to handle, and as sure as heck so does Sylvia, this was a an action packed episode with Ben and Sylvia handing the situation with aplomb, I wonder what will happen the the dogs, beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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What an exciting episode Wayne, Ben knows how to handle, and as sure as heck so does Sylvia, this was a an action packed episode with Ben and Sylvia handing the situation with aplomb, I wonder what will happen the the dogs, beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your great review!
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Most welcome
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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The text praises the well-written summary for effectively conveying the review's key points while focusing on the quality of the writing in "The Light Between Oceans." It highlights how the description of the prose accurately reflects the skillful storytelling of M.L. Stedman, with engaging and descriptive language that captures the essence of the novel's setting and characters concisely. Overall, the text acknowledges a well-composed summary that effectively showcases the strengths of the writing in the book.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you... I think.
But I believe you confused my story with a novel by M.L. Stedman.
