after love
sad little 7-line!4 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem is thought-provoking. Since this is for the "Betrayal" contest, I'm guessing that the narrator speaks of the feelings after love has gone and the sense of betrayal is that hovering wrench that could ruin the hope of love again?
Best wishes in the contest!
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Your poem is thought-provoking. Since this is for the "Betrayal" contest, I'm guessing that the narrator speaks of the feelings after love has gone and the sense of betrayal is that hovering wrench that could ruin the hope of love again?
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 02-May-2024
Comment from John Pittman
I like the ideas you want us to see. It just needs a little more structure. If your going to rhyme , do it more consistently. It sets the pace of the poem. You don't have to rhyme but use a flow. Don't be afraid of metaphors or adjectives. They help describe emotions and environments.
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I like the ideas you want us to see. It just needs a little more structure. If your going to rhyme , do it more consistently. It sets the pace of the poem. You don't have to rhyme but use a flow. Don't be afraid of metaphors or adjectives. They help describe emotions and environments.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure what the fear is here? Perhaps it is life itself as some people don't have the courage to live and be happy, an unusual post, love Dolly x x x x x
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Not sure what the fear is here? Perhaps it is life itself as some people don't have the courage to live and be happy, an unusual post, love Dolly x x x x x
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was well written. I love the imagery in your poem. Thrashing in the rain and slipping in puddles evokes a feeling of struggle and vulnerability, while the act of pretending to dance suggests that there is really no control. Wonderful word choices and an enjoyable poem.
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I thought this was well written. I love the imagery in your poem. Thrashing in the rain and slipping in puddles evokes a feeling of struggle and vulnerability, while the act of pretending to dance suggests that there is really no control. Wonderful word choices and an enjoyable poem.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024