Comment from hullabaloo22

Excellent

This was a really dramatic setting for a poem about betrayal. You managed to include some action along with the emotional content.
Very well written. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-May-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Many thanks. It was fun to write.

Comment from John Pittman

Good

This has a great storytelling feel to it. I like how words lead you to the end. It felt you got more comfortable with the flow of the poem the more you wrote.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 01-May-2024

Thanks.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This is a very good narrative poem about betrayal. You set the scene skillfully, SHOWING the reader the two mountaineers, one about to betray the other. An excellent plot twist after Jean-Paul follows his code. Sometimes your meter is uneven, but overall this is an exciting tale. Rod

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024

Appreciated, Rod. Thank you.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh my goodness, never go rock climbing with your rival is the moral of this story as death could occur for one of these adventurers, a fun poem, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024

Thank you, Dolly.