Enemies Of Our Household
our present betrayal3 total reviews
Comment from John Pittman
I understand the message but be careful of using to many words. Sometimes simple is better. You can't flow to the next line if it is jumbled. Fix those things and your writing will get better.
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I understand the message but be careful of using to many words. Sometimes simple is better. You can't flow to the next line if it is jumbled. Fix those things and your writing will get better.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem reflects a deep sense of concern over the state of society. I like that you focus on education and the erosion of moral values. It's so true. The imagery you use to describe the sin and hate that seem to be in the schools we send our youth is powerful. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Your poem reflects a deep sense of concern over the state of society. I like that you focus on education and the erosion of moral values. It's so true. The imagery you use to describe the sin and hate that seem to be in the schools we send our youth is powerful. Nicely done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Being betrayed by false people leaves us with feelings of betrayal and regret that we trusted others so easily, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Being betrayed by false people leaves us with feelings of betrayal and regret that we trusted others so easily, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Many thanks!