Onion
A Poem6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Onion, presents the common result of paring an onion, and feeling the fears or sensing the memories of something that is usually suppressed.
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This poem, Onion, presents the common result of paring an onion, and feeling the fears or sensing the memories of something that is usually suppressed.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a terrific first post! Welcome! Your haiku captures a simple moment with some interesting insight! I love how you can read into this. Of course we are going to blame the onion! But should we? It's a delightful poem that I think will resonate long after I save this review.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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What a terrific first post! Welcome! Your haiku captures a simple moment with some interesting insight! I love how you can read into this. Of course we are going to blame the onion! But should we? It's a delightful poem that I think will resonate long after I save this review.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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thank you so much !
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, I can remember those days of tears chopping the onion, best to do it underwater, let the bowl of water absorb the tears, beautifully written my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Oh yes, I can remember those days of tears chopping the onion, best to do it underwater, let the bowl of water absorb the tears, beautifully written my friend, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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thank you!
Comment from Mark Jackson
I think this is kind of clever. Obviously id is not the onion's fault so I get the idea you are addressing blame culture. However, the English Haiku has a set formula 5-7-5. This is the accepted form and I honestly feel you would be better off dropping the word Haiku. This site can be quite funny when it comes to Haiku; I have been penalised for simply choosing to add punctuation. Welcome.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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I think this is kind of clever. Obviously id is not the onion's fault so I get the idea you are addressing blame culture. However, the English Haiku has a set formula 5-7-5. This is the accepted form and I honestly feel you would be better off dropping the word Haiku. This site can be quite funny when it comes to Haiku; I have been penalised for simply choosing to add punctuation. Welcome.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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thanks you!!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Welcome to Fanstory. This is a good poem however, you have it listed as a Haiku and it is not. A Haiku has the syllable count of 5-7-5. I would suggest either removing the title of Haiku for the poem or adjusting your syllable count. The artwork works well with the poem. Please let me know when you readjust the poem and I will be happy to update your review and your rating.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Welcome to Fanstory. This is a good poem however, you have it listed as a Haiku and it is not. A Haiku has the syllable count of 5-7-5. I would suggest either removing the title of Haiku for the poem or adjusting your syllable count. The artwork works well with the poem. Please let me know when you readjust the poem and I will be happy to update your review and your rating.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the advice:) do you know how to edit a post that is not my latest?
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Yes, just find the poem in your portfolio, and click on the word EDIT and make the changes then be sure to hit save when you're finished.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Welcome. This is well written, interesting, and relatable. Many people will relate to this, and the image supports your excellent descriptions and vivid words. This is also thought provoking. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Welcome. This is well written, interesting, and relatable. Many people will relate to this, and the image supports your excellent descriptions and vivid words. This is also thought provoking. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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thanks :)
