2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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9 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Oh this is such a beautiful haiku poem, Marival. What a beautiful imagery you evoked in so few words. But that of course is the art about haiku. Un abrazo. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Oh this is such a beautiful haiku poem, Marival. What a beautiful imagery you evoked in so few words. But that of course is the art about haiku. Un abrazo. Ulla xx
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Ulla.
gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
for some reason i wanted to put "A" in the third line (to see a lake)
but that could be just me lol
anyway, a great haiku with cool imagery and a starry lake pic...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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for some reason i wanted to put "A" in the third line (to see a lake)
but that could be just me lol
anyway, a great haiku with cool imagery and a starry lake pic...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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You are right. Thank you very much, Shelley.
gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
After reading your poem, I started to wonder, how many people honestly take the time to go outside and look at the beautiful night sky. I am betting not as many as should. I think everybody should. Just take a breath of fresh air and enjoy the stars. I think the world would be a better place. Sorry, my ADD kicked in again. I enjoyed your wonderful presentation.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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After reading your poem, I started to wonder, how many people honestly take the time to go outside and look at the beautiful night sky. I am betting not as many as should. I think everybody should. Just take a breath of fresh air and enjoy the stars. I think the world would be a better place. Sorry, my ADD kicked in again. I enjoyed your wonderful presentation.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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I know what you mean, Barbara. It's important to be greatful for mother earth treasures
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That must be gorgeous to see the "lake full of stars." You always help us to see reflections without spelling out that it is a reflection. Great presentation with fabulous pictures!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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That must be gorgeous to see the "lake full of stars." You always help us to see reflections without spelling out that it is a reflection. Great presentation with fabulous pictures!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much big sister, i appreciate your excellent review and kind words. Have a fantastic weekend.
Love,
Marival
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved the imagery of lake and it's reflection of the indigo night sky dotted with diamond like stars. This poem described a relaxing moment when you become one with the environment. Great poem. Beautifully written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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I loved the imagery of lake and it's reflection of the indigo night sky dotted with diamond like stars. This poem described a relaxing moment when you become one with the environment. Great poem. Beautifully written. Gretchen
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from robyn corum
M.,
You are a master of font colors w/back-grounds.I wish I had 1/25th of the magic.
Your images are always hypnotic, too. It combines to move your poetry to next level.
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clear summer night
I lean on the veranda*s rail
to see the lake full of stars
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Love a lot of what is revealed. Q: were you taught it is okay for the poet to appear in their piece? ("I lean...")
May want to dbl-check syllable-count, too.
Beautiful presentation! Thank you!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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M.,
You are a master of font colors w/back-grounds.I wish I had 1/25th of the magic.
Your images are always hypnotic, too. It combines to move your poetry to next level.
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clear summer night
I lean on the veranda*s rail
to see the lake full of stars
*
Love a lot of what is revealed. Q: were you taught it is okay for the poet to appear in their piece? ("I lean...")
May want to dbl-check syllable-count, too.
Beautiful presentation! Thank you!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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R.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and useful feedback.
Comment from RJ Heritage
This is amazing and enchanting. I had the pleasure of seeing a similar sight once years ago, as we sat on the veranda at the bottom of a valley. It was breathtaking, as this one is, and tge way you have expressed it. Beautiful.
RJ
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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This is amazing and enchanting. I had the pleasure of seeing a similar sight once years ago, as we sat on the veranda at the bottom of a valley. It was breathtaking, as this one is, and tge way you have expressed it. Beautiful.
RJ
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a fantastic weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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You too
Comment from nancyjam
Your Haiku presents a lovely picture of a summer night and a woman alone staring at the stars reflected in a lake. She is alone and missing someone or she is wishing on those stars for someone to love.
The artwork is fantastic. I love it.
Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Your Haiku presents a lovely picture of a summer night and a woman alone staring at the stars reflected in a lake. She is alone and missing someone or she is wishing on those stars for someone to love.
The artwork is fantastic. I love it.
Nancy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Shanbreen
I was lure into reading this Haiku by your fantastic visual display. It made your words pop out and made me realize the importance of visual display in poetry writing. Thanks for sharing, Gypsy.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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I was lure into reading this Haiku by your fantastic visual display. It made your words pop out and made me realize the importance of visual display in poetry writing. Thanks for sharing, Gypsy.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you