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Searching For New Jerusalem

A poem written in 5-7-5-7-7

3 total reviews 
Comment from patcelaw
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I am very much look forward to seeing that eternal city one day. It may be closer than I think. I do not know how much longer God will keep me on this planet, but whatever time he does, I pray that I will always glorify him. Patricia.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2024

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
    Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I appreciate your thoughts. I agree. None of us is promised tomorrow. I do hope that God will keep you around for some time yet.
Comment from shelley kaye
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not a fan but i recognise the to infinity and beyond part lol

this was a nice 57577 poem
with good imagistic words
smoothly flowing over each line

one suggestion i have is maybe to center the poem too make it look like it's between the tracks? eh just a thought...

thank you for sharing
shelley :)


 Comment Written 25-Apr-2024

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
    Oh, I hadn't thought about that. I will go in and change it. Thank you for reviewing and the suggestion. Both are appreciated.
reply by shelley kaye on 25-Apr-2024
    looks great!! 😊✌️
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
    I have gone back in and centered it. I deeply appreciate the suggestion. Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Mark Jackson
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No idea what this is about but it really doesn't mater. I enjoyed reading it gazing at what is beyond infinity. However, now I have put it light that it sounds like Buzz Lightyear. I thought Rome was the eternal city?

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2024

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
    The true eternal city is the New Jerusalem. If one reads in Revelation this Earth and everything in it, including all the cities will be destroyed. And yes, I did borrow from Buzz Lightyear. I probably should have mentioned that. Thank you for reviewing and commenting on this poem.
reply by Mark Jackson on 25-Apr-2024
    It was only when I rewrote it simplify that I noticed. I would keep it to yourself.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
    Okay, I will do just that. I don't believe it an exact quote, but it might be close enough.