Renaldo's Regret
The pen is mightier than the sword.11 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
Verna, I really like what you've got going on here, and it gets a sixth star. I know you have been a frequent reviewer of mine. So you know, I'm not a poet--at least not much one like you. Please take the following comment with a grain of salt.
My input is that I would like it to be a bit longer. You got a good story and great flow. I just want a little more. It doesn't need to be Evangeline long, but maybe a few more verses. Food for thought. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Verna, I really like what you've got going on here, and it gets a sixth star. I know you have been a frequent reviewer of mine. So you know, I'm not a poet--at least not much one like you. Please take the following comment with a grain of salt.
My input is that I would like it to be a bit longer. You got a good story and great flow. I just want a little more. It doesn't need to be Evangeline long, but maybe a few more verses. Food for thought. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Terry, for a great review. You're with my college English teacher who used to say when she'd read my "blue book" (Probably too long ago for you to know about), Miss Cole, you need to expand. So, if "Brevity is the soul of wit," I must be a wit!
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LOL, I remember those blue books.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Renaldo's Regret, presented with eight ABCB-rhymed quaterns, tells either the power of the pen over the sword, or why it is that Percival was found beaten up and stuffed in the dumpster.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This poem, Renaldo's Regret, presented with eight ABCB-rhymed quaterns, tells either the power of the pen over the sword, or why it is that Percival was found beaten up and stuffed in the dumpster.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Bill - I love your conclusion to my poem. So she fell for the hunk!Th
Comment from GoWiSt
Good complementary picture art choice.
Good reading flow and abcb rhyme scheme to your quatrains.
Nice poem, but we all know that in real life, the sword is way mightier than the pen, and that chicks would choose a man of bron over brains any day. :-)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Good complementary picture art choice.
Good reading flow and abcb rhyme scheme to your quatrains.
Nice poem, but we all know that in real life, the sword is way mightier than the pen, and that chicks would choose a man of bron over brains any day. :-)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your delightful review. She must have been a very intellectual girl!
Comment from nancyjam
I love this one. What a great story of the power of the written word!
Terrific imagery throughout. Strong meter and great rhyming bring the story to life. Thanks for sharing this one. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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I love this one. What a great story of the power of the written word!
Terrific imagery throughout. Strong meter and great rhyming bring the story to life. Thanks for sharing this one. Nancy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank You so much for the lovely review from someone who understands the power of the written word!
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely ballad-style poem sharing a story with a delightful rhyme and rhythm. I like that it promotes the use of the pen rather than the sword, to win someone's affections. Very well written!
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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A lovely ballad-style poem sharing a story with a delightful rhyme and rhythm. I like that it promotes the use of the pen rather than the sword, to win someone's affections. Very well written!
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Wendy, for your excellent review for my little ballad. Thank
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A wonderful story skilfully captured in your lyrical verse! I like the way your poem is expressed in language of the time, referring to "her other swains" "Renaldo was an errant knight." He certainly lost out there to Percival - "The pen is mightier than the sword" That's for sure! Well done, Verna! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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A wonderful story skilfully captured in your lyrical verse! I like the way your poem is expressed in language of the time, referring to "her other swains" "Renaldo was an errant knight." He certainly lost out there to Percival - "The pen is mightier than the sword" That's for sure! Well done, Verna! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Debbie, for your wonderful review. Others have been suggesting that Percival one for his physical might - so I guess that's a poem for another day, or for someone who doesn't value so greatly the "pen"!
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written and it flows very well when it is read aloud. May you have a wonderful weekend? May God bless you with all of your writing? Have a good evening. Patric
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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This is very well written and it flows very well when it is read aloud. May you have a wonderful weekend? May God bless you with all of your writing? Have a good evening. Patric
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Patricia, for your excellent review, and your sweet week-end wishes, as well as blessings for my writing. I did put my latest book price very low on Amazon and put it on Kindle Unlimited, so I could share it more. (JOY ALONG MY WAY). I hope you have a blessed weekend, and your writing flourishes.
Comment from royowen
Following the great theme of the pen being mightier than the sword, plus there's two ways of showing that faint heart never.won fair maid, what a wonderful poem Verna, great poem, blessings Roy
Suggestion, like moths drawn to a flame.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Following the great theme of the pen being mightier than the sword, plus there's two ways of showing that faint heart never.won fair maid, what a wonderful poem Verna, great poem, blessings Roy
Suggestion, like moths drawn to a flame.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Roy, for a great review and your suggestion. It means a lot coming from you. Blessings right back to you. Verna
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My privilege
Comment from lyenochka
And again the pen proves mightier than the sword! I loved how you put this in those ancient days and had a poet win over a mighty knight who was a bit too full of himself. A charming ballad poem!
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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And again the pen proves mightier than the sword! I loved how you put this in those ancient days and had a poet win over a mighty knight who was a bit too full of himself. A charming ballad poem!
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you for you lovely review. I've had several suggest she probably went for the brawn instead of the brain!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
The pen is always mightier than the sword, especially if it's used to sign a Peace Agreement. You wrote a vivid poetic story with much descriptive imagery and a good message. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes
Alex
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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The pen is always mightier than the sword, especially if it's used to sign a Peace Agreement. You wrote a vivid poetic story with much descriptive imagery and a good message. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes
Alex
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for an excellent review, Alex. I appreciate it.
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You're welcome, Verna.
