Remembrance
A free verse from the heart.5 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
In a poem full of vivid imagery and passion, the line "Where are you, the breeze sways?" stands out for me.
Is "morse" meant to be "morsel"?
Perfect picture for your presentation, Jose. Lovely poem.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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In a poem full of vivid imagery and passion, the line "Where are you, the breeze sways?" stands out for me.
Is "morse" meant to be "morsel"?
Perfect picture for your presentation, Jose. Lovely poem.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Pam. :) I wrote this at the moment. I corrected the morsel and changed what stood out for you. I read it but it doesn't feel right.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent poem and presentation, with descriptive words and vivid imagery. Readers will relate to the emotional message. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes
Alex
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Excellent poem and presentation, with descriptive words and vivid imagery. Readers will relate to the emotional message. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Alex. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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You're welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
What a great poem for that picture! I see so many benches of remembrance so this is perfect. I like how the breeze and the willow trees all bring that remembrance so that it's tangible.
Suggestions:
"Where are you, the breeze sways?" ("Where are you?" the breeze sways )
looking for a morse of your love, (morsal)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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What a great poem for that picture! I see so many benches of remembrance so this is perfect. I like how the breeze and the willow trees all bring that remembrance so that it's tangible.
Suggestions:
"Where are you, the breeze sways?" ("Where are you?" the breeze sways )
looking for a morse of your love, (morsal)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Helen. :) I wrote this poem when I saw the bench. I corrected the morsel and changed what stood out for you. It doesn't feel right.
Comment from patcelaw
Message very well written for the picture of this event and I wish you the very best. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you richly. Have a good evening. Patricia .
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Message very well written for the picture of this event and I wish you the very best. May you have a wonderful week and may God bless you richly. Have a good evening. Patricia .
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Patricia. :) God bless you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Remembering our romances is all we can do when they are long gone and I enjoyed your fine poem about those losses here, some scenes bring back vivid memories, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Remembering our romances is all we can do when they are long gone and I enjoyed your fine poem about those losses here, some scenes bring back vivid memories, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Dolly.
