Death, I Fear You
A man deals with his fear of death10 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
That's right you will be reunited in Heaven with your parents. Death is not to be feared. Thank you for sharing this contest entry and good luck with the contest.
Mom had just sat down at the kitchen table to eat her breakfast. (you can omit 'down', it's understood)
MY father's death hit me hard. (My)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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That's right you will be reunited in Heaven with your parents. Death is not to be feared. Thank you for sharing this contest entry and good luck with the contest.
Mom had just sat down at the kitchen table to eat her breakfast. (you can omit 'down', it's understood)
MY father's death hit me hard. (My)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind words and grammar catches.
Both are appreciated.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I do not now, nor have I ever feared death. It is this body that dies. What I fear is p ain. I believe When our bodies are giving out we ought to be able to go to the doctors and get sent to a hospice and invite friends and family to visit for a week, and then get a big old shot and go. My opinion only. Karen
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I do not now, nor have I ever feared death. It is this body that dies. What I fear is p ain. I believe When our bodies are giving out we ought to be able to go to the doctors and get sent to a hospice and invite friends and family to visit for a week, and then get a big old shot and go. My opinion only. Karen
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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With death, there can be the fear of it and or the way we die. You, for example, fear the way of death. While others fear death itself. A third group would be those that fear death and the cause of death.
I would fall into the same group as you.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the My Worst Fear Writing Contest. This was a lovely piece of writing that spelled out your worst fear perfectly. As I grow older I am discovering that it isn't my death I fear. It is actually the death of those I love and being left alone here without them. Life is worth nothing when you are alone. Nice writing. Good luck
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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An excellent entry for the My Worst Fear Writing Contest. This was a lovely piece of writing that spelled out your worst fear perfectly. As I grow older I am discovering that it isn't my death I fear. It is actually the death of those I love and being left alone here without them. Life is worth nothing when you are alone. Nice writing. Good luck
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Marilyn,
Thank you for the kind words. They are greatly appreciated. I only enter contests that have a meaning for me. This one does. I
Please do not fear being alone. There are friends, neighbors, and others. My best friend just lost his wife. He has no family left. Yet, he has friends. We all are there for him. Plus, he is active with St. Vincent de Paul. He helps this charity a few days a week. It keeps him busy and doing something good for people. He has people there to spend time with. We have the choice to be alone or not.
These are just my thoughts.
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thank you, Richard
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Hi Marilyn, I have a new story up for vote. I would appreciate it if you could read it and if you think it is worth your vote. The House we Feared
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It sounds real but I note it's been posted under "Spiritual Fiction' so I'm confused. But does it doesn't matter either way because your story strikes at the heart and, undoubtedly made me feel very emotional. I think the most touching part was when you shared your respect and love for them as parents. I kept thinking how much I would have liked to have done that, but didn't. Your faith-inspired message is a good one because, whatever our beliefs, death is indisputably a part of our lives and, in order to embrace life, we have to embrace the reality of death. Bizarre, really, not to. Your prose reads clearly, fluently and with pace, all of which I appreciate in a story. There are a couple of suggestions, however:
The significance of death, although a little more prominent in my thoughts(,) (was still)... (continue the sentence)
(She) heartbroken (She is the subject, Her, the object)....
But thank you so much for sharing your stirring and thoughtful piece.
Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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It sounds real but I note it's been posted under "Spiritual Fiction' so I'm confused. But does it doesn't matter either way because your story strikes at the heart and, undoubtedly made me feel very emotional. I think the most touching part was when you shared your respect and love for them as parents. I kept thinking how much I would have liked to have done that, but didn't. Your faith-inspired message is a good one because, whatever our beliefs, death is indisputably a part of our lives and, in order to embrace life, we have to embrace the reality of death. Bizarre, really, not to. Your prose reads clearly, fluently and with pace, all of which I appreciate in a story. There are a couple of suggestions, however:
The significance of death, although a little more prominent in my thoughts(,) (was still)... (continue the sentence)
(She) heartbroken (She is the subject, Her, the object)....
But thank you so much for sharing your stirring and thoughtful piece.
Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Debbie
I asked if this story was real or fiction for me. It is my way of knowing my writing is convincing to a reader. It is fiction, but there are a couple of pieces that are true. The part you wrote about the parents is true. I look back on that day and with my parents gone now. How truly grateful I am that I told them what I did. My father was not one to display a lot of emotion. So, that hug meant the world to me.
That you found something meaningful in this story means the world to me. Whether I win the contest really does not matter. For me, it is having someone read this story and come away with something.
Thank you again.
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It was also very relatable to me when you mentioned about rarely seeing your father cry. The one time I saw my father cry was when, as teenagers, my sister and I were sitting in the back of a car going to my grandmother's funeral. I'll never forget seeing my father teary eyes in the driver's mirror. It was literally the first glimpse, for me, of seeing him looking at all vulnerable while we, as you noted in your story, didn't really grasp the full impact of the occasion.
Comment from Sandollar
This story was very well written. It stirred up a lot of feelings. I share the same fear as the author of this story does. But I am so glad the woman gave him a special gift by removing his fear.
"Richard, death is not to be feared. It is the next step in your life. For me, I will be back with John. I will be healthy, happy, and live eternity with no worries, only joy."
This was my favorite line, very good explanation.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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This story was very well written. It stirred up a lot of feelings. I share the same fear as the author of this story does. But I am so glad the woman gave him a special gift by removing his fear.
"Richard, death is not to be feared. It is the next step in your life. For me, I will be back with John. I will be healthy, happy, and live eternity with no worries, only joy."
This was my favorite line, very good explanation.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind words. I only enter contests that have a meaning for me. This one certainly does. I remind my children often to enjoy life, never take a moment for granted. We are all here on borrowed time.
I cannot thank you enough for the rating. Even though I have been writing for a few years. I still have a hard time believing people enjoy or find meaning in my writings. So, your rating means a lot to my confidence.
Thank you again for reading my story.
Comment from joann r romei
This was wonderful, and you and your family are lucky no one passed away young in your family, and I tell my sons all the time. that I am sad for you because you will have to see everyone go, yet no one lives forever and that's why time together is precious,
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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This was wonderful, and you and your family are lucky no one passed away young in your family, and I tell my sons all the time. that I am sad for you because you will have to see everyone go, yet no one lives forever and that's why time together is precious,
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Joann,
I cannot thank you enough for reading this story. I only enter contests that have a meaning for me. This one touched home.
The line you reference is my favorite too.
Even though I have been writing for a while, I still have a hard time believing someone actually enjoys what I have written. So, I truly appreciate your rating. It is people such as yourself that keep me writing. Thank you again!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, indeed, enjoy every moment God gives you, you already have the trappings of a life well lived, a legacy in your children, grands, God is into family, the generations He blesses, because of your Abrahamic blessing, rejoice the rider on His white horse approacheth. Blessings Roy
Typo : funny isn't (it) 2: I looked up to him with (admiration)?
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Oh yes, indeed, enjoy every moment God gives you, you already have the trappings of a life well lived, a legacy in your children, grands, God is into family, the generations He blesses, because of your Abrahamic blessing, rejoice the rider on His white horse approacheth. Blessings Roy
Typo : funny isn't (it) 2: I looked up to him with (admiration)?
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Roy, your words mean a lot to me. I do not enter a lot of contests. This one has a meaning for me. I try to live every second of every day with an appreciation of all that God has given me.
I also thank you for the errors you found. I corrected them immediately. My wife usually proofs writings for me. Unfortunately, she just had eye surgery. Just so you know. It went very well, and she is doing better.
Thank you again for taking the time to read my story.
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Wives are wonderful
Comment from shelley kaye
i saw the title and my mind just started playing "don't fear the reaper" LOL
so naturally i had to check this out to see what it was really about...
and i can totally see two kids having a snowball fight anywhere lol -
the story was interesting and held my attention
and was also thought-provoking, too -
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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i saw the title and my mind just started playing "don't fear the reaper" LOL
so naturally i had to check this out to see what it was really about...
and i can totally see two kids having a snowball fight anywhere lol -
the story was interesting and held my attention
and was also thought-provoking, too -
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind words. Especially liked the reference to "don?t fear the reaper." Love that song!
The snowball fight would have been my brother and me. LOL
It means a lot to me that someone actually likes something I wrote.
Thank you!!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Richard, this was a story I really, really needed to read. My mother-in-law, who lived with us, and who I cared for passed away this week. She had been in pain, I know that, but she was always trying to fight back. She was 87, but wanted to live to 97, which was how old her mother had been when she died. But, she had had COVID 3 times, had diabetes, and a laundry list of other things. When she was ready to go, she just went. We weren't prepared because we thought she had longer, but we weren't surprised.
The fear of death and "I'm next" has played through my mind. Both my parents died a few years ago, close together.
Your post has really helped reassure me, because you "get it". I'll miss her terribly, do already, but there is comfort.
Thank you again,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Richard, this was a story I really, really needed to read. My mother-in-law, who lived with us, and who I cared for passed away this week. She had been in pain, I know that, but she was always trying to fight back. She was 87, but wanted to live to 97, which was how old her mother had been when she died. But, she had had COVID 3 times, had diabetes, and a laundry list of other things. When she was ready to go, she just went. We weren't prepared because we thought she had longer, but we weren't surprised.
The fear of death and "I'm next" has played through my mind. Both my parents died a few years ago, close together.
Your post has really helped reassure me, because you "get it". I'll miss her terribly, do already, but there is comfort.
Thank you again,
Rhonda
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Rhonda, I am not sure what to say? I do not enter many contests. Only the ones that have a meaning to me. This was one of them. I hope you know just how much it means to me that someone read a story I wrote and found something good in it. Something that may help them even if it is just a little.
I don?t know if I am a good writer. Honestly, it only matters when someone such as yourself finds something in my writing that helps them or means something.
The pain we feel for a loved one never leaves us. It only lessens. I lost my parents several years ago. There is not a day that I don?t miss them. I believe those we love like your mother-in-law never truly leave us. All we need to do is think of them and they are there for us.
They are forever in our hearts.
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Awwww, Richard, that was even sweeter. We just had her funeral today and the house is suddenly so empty. I believe, like you said. She's here when I think about her.
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Hi Rhonda,
Just checking in to see how things are going. I hope you are doing little better?? It is never losing some you love. Richard
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Hi Richard,
Thank you so much for checking on me. I?m doing a lot better, and am in a much better place than I was that week. It?s going on 5 weeks now. I still have sad moments, but know she really was ready to go.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Teri7
In my eyes it seemed like a very real story of someone opening their heart up about how they felt about death and the change in their life when they were told about the joy when I Christian that believe in Jesus Christ has waiting for them! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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In my eyes it seemed like a very real story of someone opening their heart up about how they felt about death and the change in their life when they were told about the joy when I Christian that believe in Jesus Christ has waiting for them! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Teri, thank you for reading my story. The rating is much appreciated. I only enter contests that have a meaning to me. This one is no different. Although fiction, there are several elements from my life in it.
I have been a man of faith my whole life. Stronger as I have grown older. I believe we all fear death. Some more than others. What has always kept it from becoming a fear. Has been my faith and my belief that there is more than just our life here.
Our death is inevitable. I choose to look for the life to come.
