An American Landscape
Contrasts the beauty of the river with homelessness.5 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Welcome to FanStory, Shelia Kaye Diaz! It's so nice to read your milestone post today. I think we all agree of the sadness depicted here in your short verse poem. Not a word was wasted describing this travesty.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :))
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Welcome to FanStory, Shelia Kaye Diaz! It's so nice to read your milestone post today. I think we all agree of the sadness depicted here in your short verse poem. Not a word was wasted describing this travesty.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes in the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good poem, Shelia, with a good topic.
-You do a good job showing conditions in
Russia by using only a few words.
-Very good nature imagery and
an excellent concluding line with an
important message about how so many
are homeless in Russia and are also overlooked.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
-Congratulations on your first milestone post, too.
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-A very good poem, Shelia, with a good topic.
-You do a good job showing conditions in
Russia by using only a few words.
-Very good nature imagery and
an excellent concluding line with an
important message about how so many
are homeless in Russia and are also overlooked.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
-Congratulations on your first milestone post, too.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
Comment from RodG
Your 5-7-5 paints a vivid image of the "American landscape" on the Russian River. I would like to suggest substituting NOW for HOW. Congrats on your first Milestone here at FanStory. Rod
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Your 5-7-5 paints a vivid image of the "American landscape" on the Russian River. I would like to suggest substituting NOW for HOW. Congrats on your first Milestone here at FanStory. Rod
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
Comment from royowen
Well done with this fine entry in this contest, one has to pack a fair bit of information into these short 17 syllable poems. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Well done with this fine entry in this contest, one has to pack a fair bit of information into these short 17 syllable poems. Beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
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Welcome
Comment from Lanel Haywood
Congrats on your first milestone! This poem is intriguing. It lingers in your mind, constantly pondering the meaning, either literal or deeper. It creates a drive that makes you want to research the topic.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Congrats on your first milestone! This poem is intriguing. It lingers in your mind, constantly pondering the meaning, either literal or deeper. It creates a drive that makes you want to research the topic.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you. This is my first post in FS.
