2024 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Her".
7 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
Well, what can we say? Perhaps she does not have any idea why men react they way they do, and wonders if she does not place herself in danger simply by appearing.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Well, what can we say? Perhaps she does not have any idea why men react they way they do, and wonders if she does not place herself in danger simply by appearing.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Mark. Have a wonderful day.
gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm just going to put this out there. You really need to write fiction. Your descriptions knick it out of the ball park. I could not only see "her" I could feel her effects on those who see her and feel her vibe. Really a stellar piece of writing. Maybe just try a flash vignette. Just for shits and giggles. Lol. Great!! Gretchen
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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I'm just going to put this out there. You really need to write fiction. Your descriptions knick it out of the ball park. I could not only see "her" I could feel her effects on those who see her and feel her vibe. Really a stellar piece of writing. Maybe just try a flash vignette. Just for shits and giggles. Lol. Great!! Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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LoL shits and giggles.... I love it. (*<>*)
Thank you very much for the outstanding six stars review. I appreciate the encouragement to write fiction. I think I do better with poetry but once in a while I try prose. I need to improve my grammar.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
i can see that in her!
great write for the picture and the contest both
good imagery - like the eyes like storm clouds -
smooth flow throughout
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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i can see that in her!
great write for the picture and the contest both
good imagery - like the eyes like storm clouds -
smooth flow throughout
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
She's quite attractive but in a stormy, dangerous sort of way from this description. Well done in your 1-5-5-9 poem. My only suggestion is to use a transitive verb in the last line - instead of "rise" maybe "stir".
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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She's quite attractive but in a stormy, dangerous sort of way from this description. Well done in your 1-5-5-9 poem. My only suggestion is to use a transitive verb in the last line - instead of "rise" maybe "stir".
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Thank you big sister, I corrected that word. It Sounds better.
Love
Marival
Comment from RJ Heritage
Nice topic and beautiful words that are expressive. The tone meets the atmosphere cleverly and balances the light and dark shades like a hug.
Felt good looking at her.
Nice one,
Thanks for sharing.
RJ
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Nice topic and beautiful words that are expressive. The tone meets the atmosphere cleverly and balances the light and dark shades like a hug.
Felt good looking at her.
Nice one,
Thanks for sharing.
RJ
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You?re welcome
RJ
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love this description, 'and eyes of rain clouds'. I would love to use that description in a novel, may I kidnap it??? It's prefect. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I was closing down for the day but needed to check and you'd posted. Perfect ending to today.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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I love this description, 'and eyes of rain clouds'. I would love to use that description in a novel, may I kidnap it??? It's prefect. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I was closing down for the day but needed to check and you'd posted. Perfect ending to today.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Yes, of course, you may use it. Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
Now that particular girl in the photo is beautiful, I really can understand, the only thing is that when one has decided his wife is the only woman for him, it makes a difference, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Now that particular girl in the photo is beautiful, I really can understand, the only thing is that when one has decided his wife is the only woman for him, it makes a difference, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Roy
Gypsy
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welcome
