John and Shorty's New Laundress
A humorous western script about a clothes encounter9 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The fruitcake subject is going to get a lot of mileage here I see: " You reckon since her aunt Elvira is so bad at baking fruitcakes, that they might be good at washing clothes? After all, their family has to be good at something." Good humor: "Can't understand why anyone thinks it sounds like Russell." &"We gotta go offstage again, Shorty, so the audience will know time passed." I love your wordplay: "we are famous for our stand-up service." This is good: "We can use them to tenderize our shirts, John!" A+ material
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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The fruitcake subject is going to get a lot of mileage here I see: " You reckon since her aunt Elvira is so bad at baking fruitcakes, that they might be good at washing clothes? After all, their family has to be good at something." Good humor: "Can't understand why anyone thinks it sounds like Russell." &"We gotta go offstage again, Shorty, so the audience will know time passed." I love your wordplay: "we are famous for our stand-up service." This is good: "We can use them to tenderize our shirts, John!" A+ material
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thank you for such an enthusiastic review. It makes me want to keep writing these little humorous scripts. Hope you have a great day.
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You go girl. My autobiography is just a few little slips of this idea and that idea. I have different themes. Some are funny and some are sad. It works fine. People are loving it, so yours would work too
Comment from lyenochka
That's some starch that she put on those shirts! I guess they were right to have some trepidation about bringing their shirts to the Elvira's niece.
You used lots of fun puns throughout this "clothes encounter." I liked John's idea of putting the shirts under the saddle after all, that's how they tenderized "steak tartar." Hitting the shirts with fruitcake sounds like the shirts would need another washing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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That's some starch that she put on those shirts! I guess they were right to have some trepidation about bringing their shirts to the Elvira's niece.
You used lots of fun puns throughout this "clothes encounter." I liked John's idea of putting the shirts under the saddle after all, that's how they tenderized "steak tartar." Hitting the shirts with fruitcake sounds like the shirts would need another washing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I always appreciate it!
Comment from robyn corum
CC,
Hello, again!
This was a fun little skit. I can see the audience having a few snickers, for sure - I especially liked picturing the Jeopardy moment. Nice!
My very favorite moment was just reading the heroine's name. Honest. Very creative!
Thanks!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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CC,
Hello, again!
This was a fun little skit. I can see the audience having a few snickers, for sure - I especially liked picturing the Jeopardy moment. Nice!
My very favorite moment was just reading the heroine's name. Honest. Very creative!
Thanks!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Have a super day.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I can see a sign announcing the play OFF-Broadway for horses are no longer allowed downtown. Deris from them would create a stink. Well done!
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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I can see a sign announcing the play OFF-Broadway for horses are no longer allowed downtown. Deris from them would create a stink. Well done!
1-2-3-4-5-6-7 just to get from 141 to 150+ characters.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your great review. Yeah, I sometimes use a catch phrase or two to use up characters, too, ha ha. The last live theatrical production I saw this weekend happened to have a sign on the saloon set's bar that really did say "No Horses Allowed."
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, starch in shirts can be really quite rough, I think they might even chaff sometimes, but the boys have got it all in hand, they know that one can soften potatoes and carrots, surely shirts as well. Beautifully written Crystie, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Oh yes, starch in shirts can be really quite rough, I think they might even chaff sometimes, but the boys have got it all in hand, they know that one can soften potatoes and carrots, surely shirts as well. Beautifully written Crystie, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your great review. Yep, they have to wash their shirts after paying to have their shirts washed.
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Heh heh
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I wish I could see this little play on stage as it would have great impact with the unique accents and humour Crystie. This is inventive and entertaining and clever I loved the unique names of the Characters and the fun dialogue, the washful thinking, the starch and the crisp ironing! A pleasure to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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I wish I could see this little play on stage as it would have great impact with the unique accents and humour Crystie. This is inventive and entertaining and clever I loved the unique names of the Characters and the fun dialogue, the washful thinking, the starch and the crisp ironing! A pleasure to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your great review. One of these days I ought to figure out how to get these performed somewhere.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a wonderful story to listen to, and I enjoyed it very much. I wish you the very best with your writing. You did a very good job on the story your paragraphing in your structure and your presentation is lovely. I wish you the very best for the day and may you have a wonderful week. Patricia.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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This is a wonderful story to listen to, and I enjoyed it very much. I wish you the very best with your writing. You did a very good job on the story your paragraphing in your structure and your presentation is lovely. I wish you the very best for the day and may you have a wonderful week. Patricia.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your super review and the shiny five stars.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is wonderful stuff! I enjoyed this romp with John and Shorty, clearly not the sharpest knives in the drawer:) But very humorous, particularly in the punning department. The starched shirts are hilarious and I could visualise one standing up on the floor in all its splendour. And Alberta so dismissive of their concerns. This is an excellent, wacky script and I'm looking forward to the next! Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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This is wonderful stuff! I enjoyed this romp with John and Shorty, clearly not the sharpest knives in the drawer:) But very humorous, particularly in the punning department. The starched shirts are hilarious and I could visualise one standing up on the floor in all its splendour. And Alberta so dismissive of their concerns. This is an excellent, wacky script and I'm looking forward to the next! Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your great review. Those village gals keep outsmarting the heroes.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The dialogue in your scene has humor and charm! This reminds me of a classic Western. John, Shorty, and Miss Alberta come to life through their distinctive voices and interactions. The playful wordplay add an extra layer of enjoyment to the scene. This easily kept me engaged and entertained. Great job!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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The dialogue in your scene has humor and charm! This reminds me of a classic Western. John, Shorty, and Miss Alberta come to life through their distinctive voices and interactions. The playful wordplay add an extra layer of enjoyment to the scene. This easily kept me engaged and entertained. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Thank you for your great review. My grandparents and I and one nephew might have been the biggest western fans in the family.
