haiku (weeding never ends)
Haiku Club practice with logo (seasonal reference)20 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We attend our gardens despite the pain as we love to see our gardens flourish. Gardening is hard work, but worth it when we see our efforts as nature needs a little help from us, I enjoyed your fine words here Joan, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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We attend our gardens despite the pain as we love to see our gardens flourish. Gardening is hard work, but worth it when we see our efforts as nature needs a little help from us, I enjoyed your fine words here Joan, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Dolly, for the nice review and insightful comments
Joan
Comment from GoWiSt
Nice complementary picture at choice. Is that you in it gardening?
Nicely met the line and syllable count of a typical 5-7-5 haiku poem--and it's aptly about nature, as well. Well done.
"suffering brings life" Like a woman in labor giving birth? Or did you mean suffering 'shows' life--that one is alive?
Nice haiku.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Nice complementary picture at choice. Is that you in it gardening?
Nicely met the line and syllable count of a typical 5-7-5 haiku poem--and it's aptly about nature, as well. Well done.
"suffering brings life" Like a woman in labor giving birth? Or did you mean suffering 'shows' life--that one is alive?
Nice haiku.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Hi GW
Thanks for reading and for the positive comments. I meant the suffering of the muscles brings about the life of the garden's plants.
No that is not me in the garden.
Joan
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
A little poem that is huge in meaning.
They say 'No pain, no gain' .
Your Haiku says it all.
As an aside, everything plant I even look at seems to wither. It's quite worrying! :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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A little poem that is huge in meaning.
They say 'No pain, no gain' .
Your Haiku says it all.
As an aside, everything plant I even look at seems to wither. It's quite worrying! :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the review, Shirley.
Join the club.
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Joan.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
with endless weeding and the impact it has.
-A very good satori line shows the
benefit of all of the hard work and suffering.
-Well done; have a great day!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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-Nice image and presentation, Joan.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery
with endless weeding and the impact it has.
-A very good satori line shows the
benefit of all of the hard work and suffering.
-Well done; have a great day!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the thorough and positive feedback.
Joan
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You are very welcome, Joan.
Comment from Mark Jackson
"Weeding Never Ends" is a succinct and contemplative haiku that encapsulates the perpetual nature of gardening and the ongoing battle against nature's relentless growth. The poet skillfully conveys the cyclical rhythm of tending to a garden, highlighting the never-ending task of maintaining order amidst the ceaseless tide of weeds.
The haiku adheres to the traditional 5-7-5 syllable structure, showcasing the poet's adeptness at crafting a concise and impactful message within the constraints of the form. This disciplined approach lends the poem a sense of balance and rhythm, reinforcing its thematic focus on the repetitive nature of gardening chores.
The language is simple yet evocative, with each word carefully chosen to resonate with anyone who has experienced the laborious task of weeding. The poem's universal appeal lies in its recognition of the unending cycle of growth and decay, offering a metaphorical reflection on the transient nature of life and the continuous effort required to maintain balance and harmony.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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"Weeding Never Ends" is a succinct and contemplative haiku that encapsulates the perpetual nature of gardening and the ongoing battle against nature's relentless growth. The poet skillfully conveys the cyclical rhythm of tending to a garden, highlighting the never-ending task of maintaining order amidst the ceaseless tide of weeds.
The haiku adheres to the traditional 5-7-5 syllable structure, showcasing the poet's adeptness at crafting a concise and impactful message within the constraints of the form. This disciplined approach lends the poem a sense of balance and rhythm, reinforcing its thematic focus on the repetitive nature of gardening chores.
The language is simple yet evocative, with each word carefully chosen to resonate with anyone who has experienced the laborious task of weeding. The poem's universal appeal lies in its recognition of the unending cycle of growth and decay, offering a metaphorical reflection on the transient nature of life and the continuous effort required to maintain balance and harmony.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the this clear, thorough and positive review, Paul, It is much appreciated.
Joan
Comment from karenina
Oh, is THAT why we do it!
You nailed the form...and reminded me how cultivating a flower garden brings me both satisfaction AND numerous applications of muscle rub!
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Oh, is THAT why we do it!
You nailed the form...and reminded me how cultivating a flower garden brings me both satisfaction AND numerous applications of muscle rub!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks a lot, Karenina.
Joan
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Sure thing!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I cannot garden anymore. I sure miss it. I could zen out for hours pulling weeds, picking berries, figs, herbs and vegetables. Or, just sit out there and absorb the smells. Karen
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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I cannot garden anymore. I sure miss it. I could zen out for hours pulling weeds, picking berries, figs, herbs and vegetables. Or, just sit out there and absorb the smells. Karen
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the comments and high rating, Karen. The best part is the smells.
Joan
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:-)
Comment from GWHARGIS
Gardening is hard work. Harder if you let time lapse and disappointing if you expect too much. But I laugh about the line saying suffering brings life. Very clever and a little tongue in cheek. Gretchen
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Gardening is hard work. Harder if you let time lapse and disappointing if you expect too much. But I laugh about the line saying suffering brings life. Very clever and a little tongue in cheek. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Gretchen, for the nice review. Glad I gave you a chuckle.
Joan
Comment from royowen
You're absolutely correct Joan, this is one way of doing back breaking work, that I have, quite frankly, an aversion to, heh heh, I did fruit picking, and I avoided pick spuds, that was too hard. Beautifully written Joan, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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You're absolutely correct Joan, this is one way of doing back breaking work, that I have, quite frankly, an aversion to, heh heh, I did fruit picking, and I avoided pick spuds, that was too hard. Beautifully written Joan, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, Roy. I think a lot of don't like do do things that bring us pain.
Joan
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That?s true
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This looks like me. I hate weeding, just like everyone. When I bend down, it is so hard to get up. The words are so true. Like your picture. Very good job
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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This looks like me. I hate weeding, just like everyone. When I bend down, it is so hard to get up. The words are so true. Like your picture. Very good job
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the positive comments and all the stars, Brenda.
Joan
