Sheila
A tale from old to young2 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry
This is good. But you have many spelling errors. Most writing programs have spell checkers. Grammarly has lots of things to help including a good spell check. $12 a month. But most programs have free ones. You write a good tale. Karen
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This is good. But you have many spelling errors. Most writing programs have spell checkers. Grammarly has lots of things to help including a good spell check. $12 a month. But most programs have free ones. You write a good tale. Karen
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
Comment from CornishChick
I rated this at 5 stars for creativity. I hope you will take a few suggestions to make this story sizzle:
1. Build more tension with the hook by not explaining so much. Don't tell them who Sheila is until later in the story.
2. How did you come to name her Sheila and why?
3. Learn to SHOW not tell in your writing. Showing puts the reader right in the story. Telling is just that, like a news anchor "telling" the news. Showing is active, not passive. It moves the story along and keeps the reader engaged.
4. Use active dialog for the same reason - it puts the reader in the story.
I hope these tips help and you keep writing!
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I rated this at 5 stars for creativity. I hope you will take a few suggestions to make this story sizzle:
1. Build more tension with the hook by not explaining so much. Don't tell them who Sheila is until later in the story.
2. How did you come to name her Sheila and why?
3. Learn to SHOW not tell in your writing. Showing puts the reader right in the story. Telling is just that, like a news anchor "telling" the news. Showing is active, not passive. It moves the story along and keeps the reader engaged.
4. Use active dialog for the same reason - it puts the reader in the story.
I hope these tips help and you keep writing!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
