2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, your poem is filled with good imagery and sensory appeal. I like the comparison of her nightgown to the California sun. Beautiful presentation. A pleasure to read. Xo. M
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Hi Gypsy, your poem is filled with good imagery and sensory appeal. I like the comparison of her nightgown to the California sun. Beautiful presentation. A pleasure to read. Xo. M
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Margaret. 😊
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm wondering if today's eclipse had any effect on this beautiful club entry. Maybe, maybe not, but however it is beautifully written and presented. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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I'm wondering if today's eclipse had any effect on this beautiful club entry. Maybe, maybe not, but however it is beautifully written and presented. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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It's not for a contest.... just for fun (*÷*)
Thank you very much, Barbara
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
is this for the eclipse today? lol
nice contrast between the young girl and the sun
cool imagery, colours, and pics
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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is this for the eclipse today? lol
nice contrast between the young girl and the sun
cool imagery, colours, and pics
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley
Gypsy hugs
Comment from RJ Heritage
Such vivid colors are expressive of the words of your Haiku. I thank you for sharing this with us. My daughter says she might get into it after seeing this.
Hope you have a wonderful day.
RJ
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Such vivid colors are expressive of the words of your Haiku. I thank you for sharing this with us. My daughter says she might get into it after seeing this.
Hope you have a wonderful day.
RJ
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome
Comment from karenina
Anyone who thinks these forms are simple has never tried to write one!
Your notes pinpoint the magic...
Pare away all extraneous words and set the "essence" -- like gems, to glimmer and glow!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Anyone who thinks these forms are simple has never tried to write one!
Your notes pinpoint the magic...
Pare away all extraneous words and set the "essence" -- like gems, to glimmer and glow!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Wow, I'm honored. I hope your daughter writes haiku or tanka....they are so much fun.
Thank you very much, Karenina. 😊
Love
Marival
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She is beginning, in her early forties, to realize the joy of writing...
Comment from GWHARGIS
Ooh. I do like this one. The female persona you have bestowed on the sun is sensational. The red robe, made the sun seem so intense. Beautifully written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Ooh. I do like this one. The female persona you have bestowed on the sun is sensational. The red robe, made the sun seem so intense. Beautifully written. Gretchen
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Another beautiful poem, this is a wonderful description of how someone feels about their love, comparing her to the rising sun, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Another beautiful poem, this is a wonderful description of how someone feels about their love, comparing her to the rising sun, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, kym
Gypsy hugs
Comment from tfawcus
What a stunning picture to personify the sun rising over a California beach. That blends with the words of your haiku to form a brilliant image in the mind. It seems that the flamboyantly dressed lady also has fires burning within!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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What a stunning picture to personify the sun rising over a California beach. That blends with the words of your haiku to form a brilliant image in the mind. It seems that the flamboyantly dressed lady also has fires burning within!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Yes! You are right. I'm happy you like it, Tony. Thank you very much.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
The color reminds me of the California Poppy. I'm sure they must be blooming now and I could never get poppies growing here where we have too much rain. Beautiful descriptions in your Contemporary Haiku. I liked the "clad in coral and veiled in flames."
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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The color reminds me of the California Poppy. I'm sure they must be blooming now and I could never get poppies growing here where we have too much rain. Beautiful descriptions in your Contemporary Haiku. I liked the "clad in coral and veiled in flames."
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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You are right, poppies are our state flower. I should add it to my author notes.
Thank you very much, big sister.
Love
Marival