Comment from RJ Heritage

Excellent

I like your choice of words, which to me has deeper meaning. It is easy to understand, but not really suggestive of one thing or the other.
In my mind, this is one 'strong' aspect of a well written Haiku, contemporary or traditional.
RJ

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024

Thank you, R J, for the encouraging words and all the stars.
Joan

reply by RJ Heritage on 10-Apr-2024

You?re welcome

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

lol! great contemporary haiku about that axe!
i'm sure lizzie from the axe very freeing, too hehe

nicely done!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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 Comment Written 09-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024

Hi Shelle,
Thanks for your nice review and you're welcome.
Joan

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Joan,

Good contemporary haiku, you grabbed the concept well. Good syllable count and connection between lines. The presentation is very nice.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024

Glad you thought so, Mary Val. Thanks.
Joan

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I get your message loud and clear, and yet find me reading it differently in my head, as follows, not to say it is better but a little tighter.

When I was given the ax
and found myself
throwing it at
my former manager.

You know I know too little to critique short pieces and I am more superfluous with my speech.

Fondly yours

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024

Thanks for your continued support, Tom.
Joan

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I think you covered the rules perfectly, Joan, and what a wonderful poem it is. I can well imagine the throwing more exhilerating that the hitting. Well done, my friend, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024

Thanks for the encouraging words, Sandra.
Joan