Mister Bubble's Troubles
Children's Poem5 total reviews
Comment from GoWiSt
Nice rhymes and reading flow.
Interesting personification with a bubble having a mind. Hmm! I wonder whether a bubble cares which way it's blown--as long as it doesn't pop. :-)
Nice poem for children. Good luck!
  |
Nice rhymes and reading flow.
Interesting personification with a bubble having a mind. Hmm! I wonder whether a bubble cares which way it's blown--as long as it doesn't pop. :-)
Nice poem for children. Good luck!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
Comment from LoAnn Beery
What a clever idea to begin with.Your words floated right along with your bubble! I liked the picture you had with it, too.
I will never blow bubbles in the same way again
|
What a clever idea to begin with.Your words floated right along with your bubble! I liked the picture you had with it, too.
I will never blow bubbles in the same way again
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
Comment from jessizero
This was a sweet, rhyming poem for children. I liked the adventures of Mister Bubble! Thank you so much for sharing your poem here, and best wishes to you.
|
This was a sweet, rhyming poem for children. I liked the adventures of Mister Bubble! Thank you so much for sharing your poem here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a cute entry for the children's rhyming poem contest. The story is fun and I think would easily keep a child's interest. Good job making corrections. The first line of the final stanza still has seven syllables but I am changing my rating now because I'm sure you just missed it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
|
This is a cute entry for the children's rhyming poem contest. The story is fun and I think would easily keep a child's interest. Good job making corrections. The first line of the final stanza still has seven syllables but I am changing my rating now because I'm sure you just missed it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
-
Thanks for your review and correction. All stanzas should now have a 6-6-7-6 syllable count
Comment from M_Esther
What a cute children's poem written all about a bubble. The way you personify it and give it a mind of it's own, is clever. I could imagine this written as a kids book with pictures of bubbles. I think kids would enjoy it!
|
What a cute children's poem written all about a bubble. The way you personify it and give it a mind of it's own, is clever. I could imagine this written as a kids book with pictures of bubbles. I think kids would enjoy it!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024