The Okey-Dokey Hokey-Pokey
teaching a child to pray4 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You are my pal, but parts do not flow. Try this:
You lay your right hand out
You put your left hand out
You keep them both together
And smile instead of pout
God thinks you're okey-dokey
We're praying there's no doubt
That's what it's all about.
You bow your head in
You let your prayer out
You can whisper soft and gently
There's no need to shout
God thinks you're okey-dokey
And, he's the one with clout
That's what it's all about.
Your voice you raise
And with them your praise
You offer them together
God will hear you always
And he'll think you're okey-dokey
As your words are Heaven bound
That's what it's all about!
If you want to conform to the song and have the rhythmic flow you need adjustments like those.
Use them or not. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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You are my pal, but parts do not flow. Try this:
You lay your right hand out
You put your left hand out
You keep them both together
And smile instead of pout
God thinks you're okey-dokey
We're praying there's no doubt
That's what it's all about.
You bow your head in
You let your prayer out
You can whisper soft and gently
There's no need to shout
God thinks you're okey-dokey
And, he's the one with clout
That's what it's all about.
Your voice you raise
And with them your praise
You offer them together
God will hear you always
And he'll think you're okey-dokey
As your words are Heaven bound
That's what it's all about!
If you want to conform to the song and have the rhythmic flow you need adjustments like those.
Use them or not. Karen :-)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Please forgive the delay. Sorry. I got to this too late, but your words are very important to me. I'll try to get to them in a more timely manner in the future.
Comment from Esther Brown
Very precious. My first real prayer was for a puppy. My parents got me a coal black puppy which I named Bricket. It never occurred to me my parents had gotten the puppy for me because they heard me praying. But I figured God worked in their hearts make them want to get one for me so it is all the same thing.....
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Very precious. My first real prayer was for a puppy. My parents got me a coal black puppy which I named Bricket. It never occurred to me my parents had gotten the puppy for me because they heard me praying. But I figured God worked in their hearts make them want to get one for me so it is all the same thing.....
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Please forgive the delay. I wanted a dog, but my brother had a phobia, so I never got one growing up.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem for the contest on children's poems
incorporating an old time song Hokey Pokey.
The rhyme are good and the lyrics singable.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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This is an excellent poem for the contest on children's poems
incorporating an old time song Hokey Pokey.
The rhyme are good and the lyrics singable.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2024
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Please forgive the delay. Your words are meaningful to me.
Comment from Patricia Green1
Very cute! Just enough rhyming to keep to the rules, without overdoing. There are a few words I would change, but as far as it goes, you did a good job. Keep working at it. Trish Green.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Very cute! Just enough rhyming to keep to the rules, without overdoing. There are a few words I would change, but as far as it goes, you did a good job. Keep working at it. Trish Green.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you. I write pretty fast, and should have done a bit better, but I wanted to go on to other things.