Sun, Sea And...
Surely it is noisier than normal26 total reviews
Comment from karenina
This reminds me of the movie JAWS!
I didn't go past my knees in the ocean for the entire summer after seeing that!
Flashes are fun challenges, don't you agree?
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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This reminds me of the movie JAWS!
I didn't go past my knees in the ocean for the entire summer after seeing that!
Flashes are fun challenges, don't you agree?
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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I do. Thanks for reading.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, you had my interest from the start. Then as it got hotter the noise you spoke of became clearer as you in the last few lines mention the shark's teeth crushed the surfboard and drove the people running away from the sea. Yep, you told a complete story in 50 words. Well done. I thought it couldn't be done but you did it. Congratulations.
Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Well, you had my interest from the start. Then as it got hotter the noise you spoke of became clearer as you in the last few lines mention the shark's teeth crushed the surfboard and drove the people running away from the sea. Yep, you told a complete story in 50 words. Well done. I thought it couldn't be done but you did it. Congratulations.
Jesse
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much for the encouraging review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Michele Harber
Nicely done. You've managed to tell a complete story of a shark attack, and its effect on the other people on the beach, in only 50 words. Even more amazing is that you managed to incorporate three senses--sight, sound and touch (sort of, in "hot... hot... hot")--in such a short piece. Good job!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Nicely done. You've managed to tell a complete story of a shark attack, and its effect on the other people on the beach, in only 50 words. Even more amazing is that you managed to incorporate three senses--sight, sound and touch (sort of, in "hot... hot... hot")--in such a short piece. Good job!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much for the read and the positive review. I really appreciate both.
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You've very welcome on both counts!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good story in only 50 words. The reader knows who, what, when, where, and why they are all running away from the water. This is a very complete story in so few words.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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This is a good story in only 50 words. The reader knows who, what, when, where, and why they are all running away from the water. This is a very complete story in so few words.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
As someone who was left traumatized by the movie "Jaws" , this took me back to the first time I watched it. Nice job creating a story in 50 words for the writing prompt. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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As someone who was left traumatized by the movie "Jaws" , this took me back to the first time I watched it. Nice job creating a story in 50 words for the writing prompt. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
You did a very good job explaining a story in 50 words. It is not easy to do this. The story was interesting and written well.
The picture was matched with the words. .Great job.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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You did a very good job explaining a story in 50 words. It is not easy to do this. The story was interesting and written well.
The picture was matched with the words. .Great job.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Douglas Goff
How did this do? Mine ran out of steam. Still, this was a fun contest and very challenging.
Sharks eating surfers is always entertaining. Ha!
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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How did this do? Mine ran out of steam. Still, this was a fun contest and very challenging.
Sharks eating surfers is always entertaining. Ha!
D
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from mermaids
Your story reminds me of the movie "Jaws". You do tell a sea tale in few words. Seeing people run from the ocean is probably an indicator that a predator is in the water.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Your story reminds me of the movie "Jaws". You do tell a sea tale in few words. Seeing people run from the ocean is probably an indicator that a predator is in the water.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sallyo
Crunch! You might consider an apostrophe in sharks... a possessive shark's or sharks', depending on their number. This story works, though. It sets the situation, provokes a question, then - wham! (or crunch).
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Crunch! You might consider an apostrophe in sharks... a possessive shark's or sharks', depending on their number. This story works, though. It sets the situation, provokes a question, then - wham! (or crunch).
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thanks!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A scene from Jaws the movie here in your story full of action here for the contest, a fine presentation and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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A scene from Jaws the movie here in your story full of action here for the contest, a fine presentation and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thanks!
