2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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6 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, each day, the sun slowly sets. One minute it is there, and the next minutes it just surrenders itself as it slips into the sea. Well done. Great graphics. Good sensory appeal. A pleasure to read. Xo. Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Hi Gypsy, each day, the sun slowly sets. One minute it is there, and the next minutes it just surrenders itself as it slips into the sea. Well done. Great graphics. Good sensory appeal. A pleasure to read. Xo. Margaret
Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
thank you for putting the definition of pacific in your notes...
totally thought you mean the actual pacific ocean lol
a great haiku - deep and thought-provoking - like the ocean...
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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thank you for putting the definition of pacific in your notes...
totally thought you mean the actual pacific ocean lol
a great haiku - deep and thought-provoking - like the ocean...
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm struggling with the idea of the sun drowning. I know it appears that way when you watch it lower, but drowning is so final. Oh well, it does make for a really good poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I'm struggling with the idea of the sun drowning. I know it appears that way when you watch it lower, but drowning is so final. Oh well, it does make for a really good poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara.
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Comment from GWHARGIS
I remember when I was younger, holding my breath when the sun would go behind the horizon. I saw my first true sunset in Hawaii. I was astounded at the colors. A native Hawaiian whispered "can you hear it sizzle as it hits the water?". I get noise bumps now thinking about it. Beautiful! Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I remember when I was younger, holding my breath when the sun would go behind the horizon. I saw my first true sunset in Hawaii. I was astounded at the colors. A native Hawaiian whispered "can you hear it sizzle as it hits the water?". I get noise bumps now thinking about it. Beautiful! Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I love that phrase.... sizzle as it hits the water.... can i use it? it's rich in imagery.
Thank you very much, Gretchen. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review.
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You may use it.
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Thank you 😊
Comment from locust
I'd never heard that rule for a haiku before! Thank you for enlightening me. I really enjoyed your poem and the well chosen picture to accompany it. It almost feels like the beginning of a book... one I would definitely read!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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I'd never heard that rule for a haiku before! Thank you for enlightening me. I really enjoyed your poem and the well chosen picture to accompany it. It almost feels like the beginning of a book... one I would definitely read!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved this. It put a smile on my face because it's such a unique way to describe a sunset. Wonderful message and a beautiful presentation yet again. I thought the last line was especially strong because it came as such a surprise.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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I loved this. It put a smile on my face because it's such a unique way to describe a sunset. Wonderful message and a beautiful presentation yet again. I thought the last line was especially strong because it came as such a surprise.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs